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That was great my all-time favourite part of chapter 2 was Sango yelling to Miroku that a demon possessed Inuyasha.

That was great my all-time favourite part of chapter 2 was Sango yelling to Miroku that a demon possessed Inuyasha.Oh yeah I hope Miroku wins the bet.

COOL!! I love it so far. You are doing good and forget people that pay attention to EVERY grammar mischeck. I like it and can't wait for you to finish. I really want to see who wins. :D

My mistake. I thought you were proud of this story, even if it is for fun. I know several authors who also only write for fun. But they take pride in their work. They care enough to check their spelling and grammer.

Hey, that was cool! Update soon I want to know who wins the bet. :D

Not bad. But it could be a lot better. Please learn the difference between "there"(opposite of here), "their" (belonging to them)and "they're"(they are). Names always start with a capital letter, no matter where they are in a sentence. Also please learn the difference between "wen"( A harmless cyst, especially on the scalp or face, containing the fatty secretion of a sebaceous gland.) and "when". See what a big difference one little letter left out of a word can be? "sangos" means more than one Sango. Something belonging to Sango would be written "Sango's" The 's shows possession. You also need to learn the difference between "to", "too" and "two". "Ill" means sick. "I'll" means I will. "Im" should be written "I'm" (meaning I am.)
Since you're posting on this site, I assume you to be over eighteen. You should know these things. I realize these stories are written for fun. But taking the time to proofread and correct simple mistakes like these shows you have pride in your work, no matter if it is for fun or not.

Inuyasha trys to act nicer just so that he won't get sitted so much,I wonder how far he'll succed.My favourite part was Miroku telling Inuyasha if he won Inuyasha would have to grab Kagome's hooters.