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for What Lurks Beneath

by Roushijin

person Midnight Star
schedule August 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was a cruel trick you played on me for chapter 5. I was looking forward to the super jucy lemon that you promised. The only critice I have is that the chapter could have been longer but that's it. It's still a good fic.
person CrazyIvan(notloggedin)
schedule August 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well this is quite good indeed. Though myself I personaly am not fond of the chicken mc nuggets... wait what?
Er herm, anyways, the formating is okay, spelling and grammer fine, you bastards and your cliffies, what exactly does it mean to "quite writing"? :p Typo'd it seems, might wanna fix that won't ya. Before I go, I wonder....



WHO THE HELL DO YOU THINK YOU ARE!? WHERE DO YOU GET OFF WITH THE TITLE OF LORD?! I'LL HAVE YOU KNOW IT TAKES DECADES OF VIOLENT BLOODSHED TO ESTABLISH A ROYAL LINE!


Besides that good job, and continue on. This is CrazyIvan, signing off for now...
person angel
schedule August 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow that was great .. i cant wait in till then next chapter .. please please please please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now

angel
person New Fan
schedule August 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I had to go to fanfiction.net to read the chapter. I did not upload all the way throuhgh. You love to keep us in suspense. Update soon.
person blackpanzer
schedule August 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love this story, but you are such a tease! XP And that is what makes this story a good one. You build it up and then just cut it off with a cliffy. Oh well, it just makes me return to read more. Keep up the great work and update soon. Ja ne! =^,^=
person Coyote_Wolf
schedule August 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
AHH!!! NEED...MORE...LEMONY GOODNESS!! *blows up* *random event, someone brings her a lemon drop* ah....thats better....but please keep writing! This is such an awesome story!
person Romance/AlalaMoon
schedule August 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I got an update up... Where's yours?

LOL. I'll be looking for you.

person Midnight Star
schedule August 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Not a bad story,even if the chapters were a bit short. Waited till the last chapter to review. Can't wait till they finally get their freak on. I know it's going to be super juicy and kniky.
person Genetics
schedule August 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
.....ugh. I've said it before, and I'll say it again, no more fucking cliffhangers!
Other than that, good story ;).
person Niongi
schedule July 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I was reading getting all excited then....my world came crashing down...I was in (literatly) tears...how am i suppose to sleep? How? T_T I will be playing that moment in my mind over and over...and over... (Sesshoumaru should beat Rin's butt ;) ) and over...over...over...over...did i mentions you are so not my friend right now? :) lol