rate_review Reviews

whoop.

loved it.

Lol... you unkowingly made a fan for life... putting two of my favorite movies in it... well anything to do with Will Smith is a favorite of mine... I hope that Kagome can find love in both Hiei and yusuke... they both need her, though I don't know how Hiei would take that. He should show her his past and then she'll accept him and then everybody's happy!!

For Chapters 1-5:

Wow, this story has a lot of potential. You have set the plot up so well that there's equal chances for Kagome to end up with Hiei or Yusuke. The backstory you've made for all of this to happen is very believable too. The characters are likeable and it's nice to see them all integrate Kagome into their lives in some special way. In my humble opinion, I think that Hiei is the best pairing for Kagome. Yusuke, even though his heart was broken, his situation mirrors too much of what Kagome has already been through. He's a terrific guy, don't get me wrong, but I like Hiei as a pairing for her more. There just seems to be more chemistry between her and Hiei, primal and intense. Even though he's not as verbose as Yusuke, it's still there, and just as strong. I bet you that if Kagome spent some precious one-on-one time with Hiei just like she did with Yusuke, although doing others things, that she'd have just chemistry if not more with Hiei than she did in this last chapter with Yusuke. ;) That last chapter was really nice though, with her and Yusuke. Oooo, I bet Hiei finds them like that and finally identifies that emotion he's been feeling a lot lately, jealousy. ;) Even Yukina can tell that he's in love with Kagome. Again, I honestly think Hiei is the better pairing. He has a troubled past, that only Kagome can soothe, he opens up to her more than anyone else, watches her like a hawk 24/7, cares about her more than Yukina, and wants to spend as much time with her as he can. Overall, he is head over heels for Kagome, but he's like an innocent child who's never really experienced this sort of thing before. He really is adorable and his youkai is wonderfully possessive. I love the fact that his youkai rears its head more often than anyone elses. It really adds to the story. I do hope you keep writing this fic and update soon! ^^

So I'm finally sitting down to catch up on a lot of the reading that I haven't gotten to. So, my review for chapter four hehe. I like the interaction between the three, I think Kagome is going be good for Yusuke in getting his life back to normal. I can't say as I blame him for being pissed at Botan, my question is by the sounds of it Shizuru knew as well. If so, what are his feelings about her at the moment?

I also like how Hiei is helping Kagome deal with her own emotional instability. Heaven knows she's going to need it with the way she takes the weight of everyone elses problems besides her own. Good chapter! I'm off to read the next one.

Oh man I can just imagine how pissed Hiei is going to be when he finds out Kagome is going to be with them. I doubt he'd be able to talk her out of it though, if he'd even try. Then again he might try to order her which might cause problems too *chuckles* Can't wait to see how he takes finding out. Good chapter, update soon please.

Yep, I'm reading it again. Just finished the second chapter, and it is such a completely, wonderfully fantastic Hiei/Kag chapter that I found myself reading sections of it over and over again. When Hiei vowed to himself after seeing her story through the Jagan that he would never betray or forsake her, I could feel my heart skip a beat. That's just damn good writing. I loved it when Yusuke and Kurama were eavesdropping, and then when they agreed to protect her, I was like: Wow! You hit all the right notes. But the real kicker was the very last sentence where Hiei never let her out of his sight. Good golly and Hell's bells! I know I loved this the first (and second and third)times I read it, but somehow, THIS time, it was even better. You are SO talented, and this is SUCH a great story. I'm just loving it!

And chapter 3 is still amazing, too! Kagome's anger at Keiko and her complete empathy with Yusuke were spot on. I absolutely love it that she had Hiei spar with him to get some of his anger out. And Hiei's thoughts that she should take her own advice were great, too. But the ultimate scene was her sitting down with yusuke's head in her lap and inviting Hiei to join him -- and he did! And they were all completely content. Awesome!

And chapter four again: just excellent! Who could ask for more? Loved her interaction with Yusuke -- the way she was trying to get to know him better. I loved the revelation that the only things she knew about Inuyasha were from observation because he never talked to her. Hiei's thoughts were interesting, too. He had never trusted Keiko, huh? And he's acting jealous towards Yusuke now and wondering if he can trust Kagome. If he and Yusuke don't come to an understanding, will he consider Kagome untrustworthy for liking Yusuke, too? I sure hope they work it out! They both have formed such a bond with her. When Yusuke ran on ahead and Hiei found her where she had tripped and hurt herself because he came looking for them, it was so revealing of his feelings for her. (Even if he's still wondering what the heck they are.) Even Kagome noticed the emotion on his face and in his eyes. And I loved it when he took her hand and started helping her remove the gravel from her leg. It was such an "AW!" moment. She's the only one who brings that out in him. It was great, too, when she was walking back to the shrine with the two of them and she mentioned Miroku and they were both curious and both ready to kick his butt if he deserved it. LOL!! You really have done the most amazing job of developing her relationship with both Hiei and Yusuke. I don't think I've seen a threesome set up any better than this.

I LOVED IT. I CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE. I DO HOPE THAT IT COMES SOON. UNTILL THEN SEE YA AND KEEP UP THE WONDERFUL WORK.

I really like this story... I think you should definately make this a hiei/kag/yus fic... They would work well together...