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July 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Your story line is intriguing and it looks like you have spent a lot of time doing research. I hope you write more of this.
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July 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
omg you must update soon, this story is so cool!!!!! PEASE
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July 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You said that you are not Japanese speaker/writer/reader, so what makes you think you should try and write so much Japanese in your story? It makes people who don't read Japanese mad and it makes people who do read Japanese laugh at your mistakes.
I like your story except for all the Japanese words. Maybe you should take out a lot of the Japanese and just use the normal stuff like only their names in Japanese.
And I looked for this on mediaminer and I couldn't find it. Where did it go?
I like your story except for all the Japanese words. Maybe you should take out a lot of the Japanese and just use the normal stuff like only their names in Japanese.
And I looked for this on mediaminer and I couldn't find it. Where did it go?
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July 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like your story quite a lot, it's interesting but a couple of things on your use of Japanese. First of all in Japanese there are no plural words [eg. Incorrect: There were many sensei's. Correct: There were many sensei] Also..uh Arigatou Gozai'mashita' is past tense. Arigatou Gozai'masu' is present. Hope these help somewhat.. =D Ganbatte!
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July 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well, I have to admit that the constant use of Japanese is very irritating. And you use it incorrectly a lot. And they didn't have "yin" back then, but that is what you called the money.
If you are writing a story in English and the people reading your story come from English-speaking countries, then use English in the story.
Honestly, only very immature writers use so many Japanese words and phrases in their anime stories. It might have been a good story if it didn't need a glossary long enough to make a whole chapter, but as it is, I won't be reading any more of it.
If you are writing a story in English and the people reading your story come from English-speaking countries, then use English in the story.
Honestly, only very immature writers use so many Japanese words and phrases in their anime stories. It might have been a good story if it didn't need a glossary long enough to make a whole chapter, but as it is, I won't be reading any more of it.
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July 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
LOVE the story and really like how you're incorporating Japanese terms into it, especially the ones for the Geisha lifestyle and everyday items. I get shivers at visualizing Inuyasha in a full Geiko regalia! Will Sesshoumaru find out what happened to his younger half-brother, if so, what will he do? Will Naraku show up in the story? How about Kouga? Can hardly wait to see what happens next...
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July 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love it hope you update soon cause this so good it was cooler than cool anyways update soon can't wait for the real chap on 4 till next time bye-bye.
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July 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow, this was great. imagine my heartbreak when chapter
four was not a chapter. oh well, i hope you update soon. i'm
dying to see what happens to inuyasha next.
four was not a chapter. oh well, i hope you update soon. i'm
dying to see what happens to inuyasha next.