rate_review Reviews

I didn't think your last chapter was useless. I really enjoyed it. I think your writing is brillian and I hope for a new chapter soon. It funny, I have you on my aol favorites list and on my cell phone and I know I will be checking it like everyday so I can get more of this story and your addictive writing style. I really love Haru. And I'm not one to fall in love with OC's it's only happened three times. In your story on in my sisters and a random one. Yours (not surpisringly) being my favorite. I sincerly hope you update soon because I reallu have enjoyed reading your story. ^_^ Have a nice night!

Laters~
Jonni... or Spander.... it's my username here but I just didn't feel like logging in. lol

P.s. Oh and before I foget I really love the way you write every character they are all so awesome! You stay true to the manga but add your own little flare to it which I can really appreciate. Good job! (And I absolutly adore Izoyai... I can't spell her name please forgive me. lol)

I have read this entire fic in one day and I must say that I enjoy the ups and downs of this story. I agree also with A sentinal mother being a awesome story. Reading both stories have modivated me to continue my own fic. Thanks for the excellent work and modivation.

Ok during my reading chapter seven I just had to reveiw in the middle of the entire thing. You got alot of key detailing in the story mixed up and otherwise wrong
For one thing you spell the name of inuyasha's sword wrong its spelled "Tetsusaiga" Not Tetsaiga.

More importantly the two things that ticked me off the most.

When she said "You know im not even going to say sit because you arent even worth it" Thats basically what she said.
Well she said sit in that sentence so Inuyasha would have been slammed to the floor anyways.

Last but not least, and the most important thing. The entire reason I decided to writ you.
When Jaken said "Yes I was the retainer to the Great Inutaisho as was I the retainer to his father before him. Never have I felt more proud than to see Lord Inutaisho rule over the Western Lands. He was by far the strongest the House of Inu has ever produced."

Thats not true, hes indebted to Sesshoumaru because he saved his people. You should read up on your facts and pay attention to the story/show ext before making up
a characters past and switching things around.

Don't let the flames get to you. Rudeness over an internet forum is a sign of immaturity and not a reflection of your work. I'm enjoying the story. You also get coolness points in my book for naming your computer Slartibartfest. (I wonder how many people get the reference?)

i love the story and can not wait for the next chapter of the story and see if sess and kagome fall in love and lvoe it . up date soon. be waiting.

Ok... have to say you are making this a very good read... I rather like how you manage to keep them in character yet still make this your story. I picture Haru looking like Jareth (David Bowie) in Labyrinth. *horny chills and drool*

Criticisms:
I think we need to see more of that Jealousy you mentioned with Rin.
What is gonna happen with Kaede's Soul?
Is Sesshy gonna let Kags keep Shippo?
Please make the baby a girl, just for spite.
I like how you made Izayoi a friend to Sesshy, I think maybe her death made him colder.
I would like to see your take on what the point of friction is between Inu and Sesshy.
I would also like you to somewhere down the line send Kagura to seduce Sesshy and explore Kagome's feelings on that.
These things I ask because I think they would enrich your already magnificent work.

Just some suggestions.

Patiently awaiting your next chapter,

Holly S
"I must leave, for there they go and I am their leader."

I love your story... at times it is confusing... but overall it's a wonderful story. I hope you update sometime soon.

Aw! I was so excited to see this story at the top of the page because I've been hoping for a new chapter. I'm sorry you got some silly reviews complaining about the last one. While I won't deny that I love the ones with Kagome interacting with Sess (and the other suitors) MORE, I also appreciate the insight into Sess and haru's past. It also told a bit about the situation Inuyasha was born into. All valuable stuff. I'm glad you are going to continue with this -- I just love it, and I will be anxiously awaiting your next installment. (Until then, I think I'll go back and read it through again.)

I'm sorry to read that. I really love your story, and I don't think there are any useless chapters. I agree with yiu when you say some parts are necessary for the plot and, although I would love to get to a part of the story where Sesshomaru and Kagome are together I love it that other men like her, I think that is intended to be so Sesshomaru reconsiders his feelings for Kagome, or so I hope. However, either Sesshomaru and Kagome end up together thus Sesshomaru realising he doesn't care Kagoem is human, or not I always enjoy a well written story. And your stroy IS very well writen. I just wish you would update sooner. This is the first time I ever review your story, I don't know if you will ever read it because I've tried creating an account and loging in but I'm not alowed.

Your story is awesome! I can't wait for you to update the next chapter!