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November 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This was a most excellent story, and very well presented. The different perspectives flowed beautifully. Unfortunately, the ended leaves so many questions unanswered.
When she was picked up in the well, who was holding her?
As another reviewer stated, Kurama would not be able to miss Yomi's scent on her, and in fact, neither would Inuyasha. Both would also be more than aware of what had been done to her, as well. What was Kurama's reaction to this?
Would Kurama be inclined to confront Yomi about this?
What would Yomi's reaction be to her having gotten away by jumping into the Bone Eater's Well?
Not having her name, would Yomi remember her with all of the time that has past for him?
He would catch her scent when confronted by Kurama, how would this affect him?
If he were to see her again, how would both of them react?
Did his actions to Kagome do more than just take her virginity?
As Yomi has reconciled with Kurama, this new development would have some kind of impact, whether it is acceptance of the matter or otherwise. There are a number of possibilities to this:
Kagome forgiving Yomi and a potential relationship? Slim, but hey...this is fanfiction and anything is possible.
Kurama making it more than obvious that Yomi will keep his hands off! Yomi deciding that he will reclaim her after having chosen to do so before she escaped! Both youkai coming to some kind of agreement to both take her! Kagome finds that she is with Yomi's child, and not wanting for it to be raised without his/her/its father, deciding to try to make Yomi be a responsible parent. Kurama agreeing to help raise the child as his own! The possibilities and unanswered questions that you fic raised are almost limitless.
Even if you do not wish to make a full story out of this, making it a two or three shot would most definitely be a bonus to making an already great fic, even better than it already is.
When she was picked up in the well, who was holding her?
As another reviewer stated, Kurama would not be able to miss Yomi's scent on her, and in fact, neither would Inuyasha. Both would also be more than aware of what had been done to her, as well. What was Kurama's reaction to this?
Would Kurama be inclined to confront Yomi about this?
What would Yomi's reaction be to her having gotten away by jumping into the Bone Eater's Well?
Not having her name, would Yomi remember her with all of the time that has past for him?
He would catch her scent when confronted by Kurama, how would this affect him?
If he were to see her again, how would both of them react?
Did his actions to Kagome do more than just take her virginity?
As Yomi has reconciled with Kurama, this new development would have some kind of impact, whether it is acceptance of the matter or otherwise. There are a number of possibilities to this:
Kagome forgiving Yomi and a potential relationship? Slim, but hey...this is fanfiction and anything is possible.
Kurama making it more than obvious that Yomi will keep his hands off! Yomi deciding that he will reclaim her after having chosen to do so before she escaped! Both youkai coming to some kind of agreement to both take her! Kagome finds that she is with Yomi's child, and not wanting for it to be raised without his/her/its father, deciding to try to make Yomi be a responsible parent. Kurama agreeing to help raise the child as his own! The possibilities and unanswered questions that you fic raised are almost limitless.
Even if you do not wish to make a full story out of this, making it a two or three shot would most definitely be a bonus to making an already great fic, even better than it already is.
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September 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This was great! Please, please, please make more of this story
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August 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well, I somehow missed this one when it was first posted. What an oversight. How sad for everyone. You do an excellant job of giving insight into everyone's thoughts and actions. I like that. Allowing Kagome to return home and the openness of what might happen next was very poignant. Thank you for all of your hard work writing such excellant pieces.
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August 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Argh! How can you write such an awesome story and not add another chapter to it. Anyway, thanks so much for this unique pairing. I've only read one other story with Kagome and Yomi, but the author hasn't finisshed it as well. So, with that said please, please update soon. Ja.
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August 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, you seem very into these one-shots that leave the readers wanting so much more. I hope you could possibly consider continuing on this one! I really like it and look forward to some future works!
Amy
Amy
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July 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG.....I can't believe you ended it there. There is no way this can be a one-shot, there so much more to this story. Not to mention you left it at a MAJOR cliffy. Please find it in your heart to continue, its amazing. What you wrote is amazing and please continue.
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July 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i love this but you cant stop here please keep going please
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July 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
oh please please please dont make this a one shot!!!! i want more to come out of it...like maybe she gets married and kurama takes her to the makai and theres yomi!!!! oh please keep writing. this is such an awsome story!!!! i couldnt stop reading!!! please continue it!
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July 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Your story is really good, keep up the good work. I wish that you where going to continue writing on this story, I know it would be really good and people would like it. But it's up to you. Can't wait to read other story's you make. :^)
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July 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hu...wha...WhA...HU....WHAT?????? You can't just LEAVE it like that!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Who the hell brought her out of the well???? ACK!!!!! I know you mean this as a one-shot, but there's Waaaaaaaaay too much going on here for it to just....
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END!!!!!!!! I'd assume, if Kurama had her that he'd smell Yomi, or never mind that, even if it's Inuyasha, he's going to start bellowing about what happened. Holy Mother of Pearl, am I only to rely on my sordid imagination to parse the details???? NO!!!!!!!!
Oh, and fabulous, steamy lemon BTW. It's just....just...that this idea has way too much potential for a full blown story, a dark, twisted, extremely hentai one. I mean, Kurama just earned Yomi's forgiveness, but imagine how the tables would turn if Kurama discovered that Yomi took Kagome like a street-whore! I mean, the hit-or-miss, Youko-*should've*-been-there-but-WASN'T tension is just TOOO MUUUUCH!!!!!! AUUUUGH!!!!!!
*Whew!* Okay, I'm gonna shut up now. If nothing else, I obviously enjoyed every minute of it! ^_^
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END!!!!!!!! I'd assume, if Kurama had her that he'd smell Yomi, or never mind that, even if it's Inuyasha, he's going to start bellowing about what happened. Holy Mother of Pearl, am I only to rely on my sordid imagination to parse the details???? NO!!!!!!!!
Oh, and fabulous, steamy lemon BTW. It's just....just...that this idea has way too much potential for a full blown story, a dark, twisted, extremely hentai one. I mean, Kurama just earned Yomi's forgiveness, but imagine how the tables would turn if Kurama discovered that Yomi took Kagome like a street-whore! I mean, the hit-or-miss, Youko-*should've*-been-there-but-WASN'T tension is just TOOO MUUUUCH!!!!!! AUUUUGH!!!!!!
*Whew!* Okay, I'm gonna shut up now. If nothing else, I obviously enjoyed every minute of it! ^_^