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January 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I love the story so far, this chapter was great.. the plot has thickened up very nicely, I love the way you make Sess uke, most stories I see with him uke.. he seems.................. out of character, and....... faery like, just cause hes on bottom doesnt make him a princess priss, you know? please, email me if you update, I offer to beta any time, if your other one is busy.
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January 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hi, I hope that you'll have chapter 12 up soon.I'm guessing that there will be some InuT/Ryuu action or something, huh?
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January 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey, just let you know I got this story up. It's called "Tokyo Drift". I want you to read it and tell me how it is.
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December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I never know what to write in my reviews, so I rarely do it...but I absolutely love this story (must have read and re-read it three/four times now), so I figured I'd better de-lurk and say SOMETHING. ^_^
(Though, I AM getting better at leaving reviews, so this might not be the last time you hear from me...) ^_^
Anyway, I really do love this story. I like the interaction between Inuyasha and Sesshomaru. I like sub-Sessho...it's pretty hard to find, so I'm really glad to have found a good, WELL WRITTEN one! ^___~
Anyway, great job! I eagerly await the next chapter! ^__________^
(Wow, look'it all the smilies... O_O)
(Though, I AM getting better at leaving reviews, so this might not be the last time you hear from me...) ^_^
Anyway, I really do love this story. I like the interaction between Inuyasha and Sesshomaru. I like sub-Sessho...it's pretty hard to find, so I'm really glad to have found a good, WELL WRITTEN one! ^___~
Anyway, great job! I eagerly await the next chapter! ^__________^
(Wow, look'it all the smilies... O_O)
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December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
An absoltely fantastic story. You played each character perfectly. I think that Sesshoumaru should be uke. There are not enough of them. Please keep writing, and keep writing fast. One more thing before I leave you alone.
1) The hanyou didn’t completely buy into it, but he figured that his father was trying to cover up something even stupider that he had done. Like the time I walked into the room and saw something that involved a potato, a hammock, a mirror and six lit candle sticks. That was a day Inuyasha wanted desperately to forget.
I would like to know what happened with a potato, a hammock, a mirror and six lit candle sticks. But I am wondering if I really want to know.
Anway, this is a great story, YOU ROCK MY FUCKING RAINBOW COLORED SOCKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *foams at mouth* *wipes mouth and laughs embarrassedly.* Sorry a little, okay way to much sugar and or coffee.
1) The hanyou didn’t completely buy into it, but he figured that his father was trying to cover up something even stupider that he had done. Like the time I walked into the room and saw something that involved a potato, a hammock, a mirror and six lit candle sticks. That was a day Inuyasha wanted desperately to forget.
I would like to know what happened with a potato, a hammock, a mirror and six lit candle sticks. But I am wondering if I really want to know.
Anway, this is a great story, YOU ROCK MY FUCKING RAINBOW COLORED SOCKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *foams at mouth* *wipes mouth and laughs embarrassedly.* Sorry a little, okay way to much sugar and or coffee.
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December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Don't crunch ur words together. Bleh Inu on top. hes Uke.
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December 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
GREAT CHAPTER...
I WOULD HAVE LOVED MORE IF KIKYO STAYED DEAD, BUT, ANYWAY... IT WAS GOOD!
HOPE INUYASHA FORGIVE SESSHOMARU SOON. THEY WILL BE VERY SAD IF THAT DOES NOT HAPPEN, THAT I THINK.
AND HOPPING THE RELATION BETWEEN THE FOUR GETS BETTER... I MEAN, THEY ARE FAMILY AFTER ALL!!!
HOPE YOU UPDATE SOON... BUT, NO PROBLEM. TAKE YOUR TIME TO DO IT!!!
I WOULD HAVE LOVED MORE IF KIKYO STAYED DEAD, BUT, ANYWAY... IT WAS GOOD!
HOPE INUYASHA FORGIVE SESSHOMARU SOON. THEY WILL BE VERY SAD IF THAT DOES NOT HAPPEN, THAT I THINK.
AND HOPPING THE RELATION BETWEEN THE FOUR GETS BETTER... I MEAN, THEY ARE FAMILY AFTER ALL!!!
HOPE YOU UPDATE SOON... BUT, NO PROBLEM. TAKE YOUR TIME TO DO IT!!!
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December 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well, I am soooooo happy I found this story. I'd missed it before, so I simply got to read the whole thing in one shot while bored and sick at the in-laws. Soooo, review for everything I've read.
1. I really admire how fully you portray your characters. InuTaisho was such a hysterical, fascinating charcter almost immediately. The odd, quirky little actions and brief details gave such an instant, quickly rounded out character that it drew me in totally. I was just on tenterhooks, hoping we'd get to see Ryuu and him together, and I was not disapointed. I love how they interact, especially the knowledge they have of each other after all those centuries together. And for whatever reason, InuT as the uke is terribly sexy. Not something I ever would have thought of, but wooo hooo. Thanks for the imagery!!
2. Sessh and Inuyasha are lovely together too. I love their portrayal, and while Sessh killing his fetus shocked me, at the same time, I could completely see that happen with how his character had been reacting, so it completely worked for the story, in my opinion. I like the inner thoughts of Sesshoumaru, in many cases because for me, they soften him, letting us know how much he has ended up caring for his brother. Without that, I think it would have been harder to sympathize with him, and there would have been too much love of Inuyasha by the reader. The flashbacks totally worked for me in that capacity as well.
3. I think my favorite line is "the warlord who can’t match his clothing for shit" I couldn't tell you why, but that line stuck in my head and I'm still getting a chuckle out of it.
4. I thought the Izayoi flashback was very poignant, especially her thoughts on dying before Inuyasha has ever really grown. It totally got to me.
5. I love how the plot has progressed, and I am looking forward to the rest of it. Considering how crazy life can get, I just want to say, thank you so much for struggling through it and writing this!!
Look forward to the rest of this!!
1. I really admire how fully you portray your characters. InuTaisho was such a hysterical, fascinating charcter almost immediately. The odd, quirky little actions and brief details gave such an instant, quickly rounded out character that it drew me in totally. I was just on tenterhooks, hoping we'd get to see Ryuu and him together, and I was not disapointed. I love how they interact, especially the knowledge they have of each other after all those centuries together. And for whatever reason, InuT as the uke is terribly sexy. Not something I ever would have thought of, but wooo hooo. Thanks for the imagery!!
2. Sessh and Inuyasha are lovely together too. I love their portrayal, and while Sessh killing his fetus shocked me, at the same time, I could completely see that happen with how his character had been reacting, so it completely worked for the story, in my opinion. I like the inner thoughts of Sesshoumaru, in many cases because for me, they soften him, letting us know how much he has ended up caring for his brother. Without that, I think it would have been harder to sympathize with him, and there would have been too much love of Inuyasha by the reader. The flashbacks totally worked for me in that capacity as well.
3. I think my favorite line is "the warlord who can’t match his clothing for shit" I couldn't tell you why, but that line stuck in my head and I'm still getting a chuckle out of it.
4. I thought the Izayoi flashback was very poignant, especially her thoughts on dying before Inuyasha has ever really grown. It totally got to me.
5. I love how the plot has progressed, and I am looking forward to the rest of it. Considering how crazy life can get, I just want to say, thank you so much for struggling through it and writing this!!
Look forward to the rest of this!!
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December 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh wow! So, Sesshoumaru really didn’t recognize jealousy? Even after all the times that he had accepted gifts from Inuyasha? What a bonehead! That was an excellent history to give them. Intense! I am rarely impressed with backtracks, but you did a great job. I just wonder how long it took Inuyasha to get over it and whether or not Inuyasha was aware that his father saved Kikyou.
Sesshoumaru chucking a bone at Inuyasha was priceless! Inuyasha gets his share of that in Centennial Hunger! LOL Just the thought of Sesshoumaru doing something so spontaneous is cute and endearing. It makes him seem younger.
I was surprised that Sesshoumaru allowed Inuyasha those first touches. And, Inuyasha was so understanding. It was sweet. Ah, it was such a satisfying relief when Sesshoumaru returned Inuyasha’s kiss. Oh my, Inuyasha was really good at seduction.
This was so funny: “So eager just to please me. Perhaps I shall throw myself in front of lightning bolts more often.”
When the pov changes mid-paragraph, it gets a bit confusing. If there wasn’t a change in pov, it needs to be worded to make it clearer. For example, this one confused me:
“The hanyou was smiling as he looked down at Sesshomaru's swollen cock below him. He licked his lips before smoothing them over the youkai's length, sliding down until the tip reached the flesh of his throat. Sesshomaru gasped, his torso rising upward just a tiny bit. A pair of strong hands grabbed his hips and pushed them down firmly to the ground while still languishing his tongue all over his captive prize.”
At first, it seemed that we were seeing Inu’s pov, then it appeared to switch. I do that when I’m in a hurry. It would have been easier to decipher if these were combined into one paragraph:
“Sesshomaru gasped, his torso rising upward just a tiny bit. A pair of strong hands grabbed his hips and pushed them down firmly to the ground while still languishing his tongue all over his captive prize.
Sesshomaru's eyes fluttered open in surprise at the impact of his butt with the ground and the strength behind the way he was held in that exact spot. What was he supposed to do now? He had allowed himself to show a little bit of the pleasure he felt.”
Got in a hurry, dincha? LOL
It was wonderful to see Sesshoumaru attempting to be the beta, but I thought that he was determined to be seme. I’m going to have to go back and read the last chapter.
Oh, I loved this! “This feeling was not displeasing. It made him belong.” Warm, tickling fuzzies!
Well, it’s midnight and my brain has gone on vacation. Can’t you tell? I will probably read this when I am more awake and pound my head into the desk for not commenting on something very deserving of notice. LOL Great chapter, loved the lime. Now if I could only work on my own fic. Hm, it was about this time of night that I came up with rabid demon rat impersonators. Maybe now would be a good time? LOL
Keep up the good work!
Snowfall aka Hanyou Slave
Sesshoumaru chucking a bone at Inuyasha was priceless! Inuyasha gets his share of that in Centennial Hunger! LOL Just the thought of Sesshoumaru doing something so spontaneous is cute and endearing. It makes him seem younger.
I was surprised that Sesshoumaru allowed Inuyasha those first touches. And, Inuyasha was so understanding. It was sweet. Ah, it was such a satisfying relief when Sesshoumaru returned Inuyasha’s kiss. Oh my, Inuyasha was really good at seduction.
This was so funny: “So eager just to please me. Perhaps I shall throw myself in front of lightning bolts more often.”
When the pov changes mid-paragraph, it gets a bit confusing. If there wasn’t a change in pov, it needs to be worded to make it clearer. For example, this one confused me:
“The hanyou was smiling as he looked down at Sesshomaru's swollen cock below him. He licked his lips before smoothing them over the youkai's length, sliding down until the tip reached the flesh of his throat. Sesshomaru gasped, his torso rising upward just a tiny bit. A pair of strong hands grabbed his hips and pushed them down firmly to the ground while still languishing his tongue all over his captive prize.”
At first, it seemed that we were seeing Inu’s pov, then it appeared to switch. I do that when I’m in a hurry. It would have been easier to decipher if these were combined into one paragraph:
“Sesshomaru gasped, his torso rising upward just a tiny bit. A pair of strong hands grabbed his hips and pushed them down firmly to the ground while still languishing his tongue all over his captive prize.
Sesshomaru's eyes fluttered open in surprise at the impact of his butt with the ground and the strength behind the way he was held in that exact spot. What was he supposed to do now? He had allowed himself to show a little bit of the pleasure he felt.”
Got in a hurry, dincha? LOL
It was wonderful to see Sesshoumaru attempting to be the beta, but I thought that he was determined to be seme. I’m going to have to go back and read the last chapter.
Oh, I loved this! “This feeling was not displeasing. It made him belong.” Warm, tickling fuzzies!
Well, it’s midnight and my brain has gone on vacation. Can’t you tell? I will probably read this when I am more awake and pound my head into the desk for not commenting on something very deserving of notice. LOL Great chapter, loved the lime. Now if I could only work on my own fic. Hm, it was about this time of night that I came up with rabid demon rat impersonators. Maybe now would be a good time? LOL
Keep up the good work!
Snowfall aka Hanyou Slave
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December 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
man.. now inuyashs know about what sess did to the unborn pup ... please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more .. have a merry x-mas and a happy new years.. later
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