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This is a really good story, but I would love to find out what Sesshomaru thinks of Inuyasha when they have these meetings.

this is a good story, could you write more?

I really liked this.

Very enjoyable- I'm looking forward to reading more of yur work-

Oh wow...that was actually, really really good...*gulps* I'm nervous about how I'm gonna work through my story now, LoL...*gives two thumbs up*

wonderful

This was an incredibly beautiful one-shot. The lover's previous conflict sets the stage for the seeming coldness of the encounter and yet you managed to make it passionate. What appears to be tender behavior at the end was a pleasant surprise and gives a twist that leaves the reader satisfied that they have just read a fic that actually has meaning. This is actually a perfect setup for an approach/avoidance fic should you decide to continue on with a larger plot. I'm sure that I speak for many readers when I say that your style, flow, and depth would always bring me back for more. You can be certain that you have the ability should you consider making the attempt. Personally, I look forward to reading any future fics that you author.

Thanks for the beautiful review on Torn. I had never thought about the story the way that you described it. I was hoping to convey that our actions are not always good or evil, but done out of what we feel will help another, although there is usually some selfish motivation involved. Perhaps I succeeded in making the characters more three dimensional. Again, thanks for such an introspective review of Torn.

Snowfall aka Hanyou Slave

That was certainly different. In a good way, of course. It was sort of strange to hear almost nothing from Sesshoumaru, but that also added to the story's appeal.

Not bad, not bad at all. I see no problems with it. Poor Inuyasha though, just getting used and then thrown away. Except for tonight, but I wonder seriously, why did Sesshomaru come to him? Could you write one that focuses more on his point of view to answer those questions?

So is this a one shot deal. Or will you write more chapters. Because I really think that this could be turned from a pwp into a developing love story. And it's also set for for my favorite kind of developing love story. The kind where the characters have sex right from the beginning and all through the story. From the way this fic ended it looked like Sesshoumaru was finally starting to feel something for Inuyasha or to at least finally start to show that he feels something for Inuyasha. There's a whole world of possibilities in which this story could follow and all coming up with very different fics depending upon which way you choose to go. Like this Inuyasha expects Sesshoumaru to be gone in the morning what if he was wrong what if Sesshoumaru were still there when he woke up. Preferably still holding him but he could be nearby too. What if the reason that Sesshoumaru has for still being there is that he's realized just how much Inuyasha means to him. Only because he's Sesshoumaru he won't admit that to Inuyasha but instead simply tells Inuyasha that he will be traveling with him and his group for the time being. What if Inuyasha were stunned at the news but is unable to denie his mate just about anything. So he agrees. And What if Sesshoumaru doesn't want to keep the secret of Inuyasha being mated to him. And let's say (once the group gets over it's shock about them being mates) Sesshoumaru wants to make it very clear that Inuyasha is his. So he does little stuff like grabbing him and kissing him whenever he wants to and when they sit down to dinner he pulls Inuyasha into his lap, and at night he either pulls Inuyasha into his lap to sleep or he pulls Inuyasha down beside him. Let's also say that Sesshoumaru used his tail to wrap around Inuyasha both to keep him warm and to keep him in place. (I don't think anybody knows what that furry thing is but I prefer it being a tail. Because than he can use his tail to tease or control Inuyasha. Anyway I hope you continue this fic I really loved it and would love to see it continued with or without my Ideas/suggestions. Although I would love to see them used I gave them as an example on one or so of the ways this fic could be continued. If you do continue it don't get discouraged by only a few reviewers at first it takes time to gather a following and become known to people. The more you post and the more chapters you have the more likely it is that people will see your fic. But don't think that I'm saying do extremely short chapters because that is really irratating. They don't have to be really long just not really really short unless you have a specific reason for doing a short one. Anyway (didn't I already say that) Great story. Keep up the good work. You may want to consider using a beta if you are going to write a fairly long story. Although you did really good with this one. Unless I missed something at the top saying it was beta'd by so and so. In which case sorry for suggesting the beta. It's not that I think you need one so much as having somebody else go over the story and suggest things is a pretty good idea. They tend to catch things you the author would miss.
Sincerely Catchfire