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for Sweet Spring Caress

by Bunnybop102

person krimson kitsune
schedule July 30, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Hi. Just want to say that separating this out into paragraphs would really help the reader understand- especially when you change who is speaking. Also, it this is an internal dialog inside Kagome's head, you should say something about that too. From the way it looks now, it sounds like Kagome is holding a conversation with herself-out loud! Most authors italicize internal dialog. Hope this helps.
schedule October 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Update,update,update update U.P.D.A.T.E uuuupppppddddaaattteeee!!!!!!!!!!!! Please(on knees begging like puppy for treat)Hurry and update!

*LunaKageTenshi* {and if you don't...well we'll get to that later}
person Momi
schedule July 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
More plz.
person sesshy'sgirl
schedule July 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
please update/continue. i love the Sess/Kag pairing!
thanks
person Megan Consoer
schedule June 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
person Anon
schedule June 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
more and please longer !!!
person Stephena
schedule June 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You need to get the second chapter up. I want to know what will happen.
person aurora
schedule June 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
nice very nice i like it a lot please update
person Inu_Twins
schedule June 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!! U meani!! U can't just stop there!! U have to Update!! I want to know wat happens!! Plzzz Update soon!!!
person NingenKun
schedule June 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Dude, This story is teh suxxor. Do the writing community a favor and *don't* continue!!!1111eleven