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for Hot Spring Haze

by AngelHarlock

person Iyasu
schedule September 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It wasn't bad, but I think that Sango was a little out of character. I mean, I'm pretty sure that she wouldn't just take the joint and try it like that. Also, you had a few grammatical errors like run-on sentences and not doing some of the dialogue properly.