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September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hindsight has its downside as reat performances are ensue
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September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
kids that was some sit should have just let them fight would have hurt less
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September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
what i do to my own recollect i bash it letting my self an anyway yours i read hmmph go figure
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September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
adult fan fiction remember get it
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September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
thanks for the waste of literture you called hindsight
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September 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
First off ya can't be Jinxed 'cause thats me - da jinxed 1... get it? ;o)
Now then I just wanted to say that I am really enjoying your story and hope for an update soon,
but, I do understand homework and you'd be suprised at what you need to know in the
most suprising of circumstances... and as has been quoted from time immemorial "Knowledge is power."
Now get to work!!! ;o)
Now then I just wanted to say that I am really enjoying your story and hope for an update soon,
but, I do understand homework and you'd be suprised at what you need to know in the
most suprising of circumstances... and as has been quoted from time immemorial "Knowledge is power."
Now get to work!!! ;o)
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September 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I’m reviewing as I read because I have a bad habit of forgetting stuff that I really like. ^_^
[“Even better, he was well on his way to scratching his proverbial murdering itch.
All he had to do now was locate Keichi.”] Oh, that was just too good. That whole beginning scene involving Sesshoumaru’s plummet to the earth was great for your setup of Sesshoumaru’s personality. I love his violent side and you do it so well.
OMG! That rat thought that he could set himself up in Sesshoumaru’s place!? My blood is boiling now!
[““And which proof would that be? As far as I can tell, I’m quite alive.” Sesshomaru was glad to note that his guards had not betrayed him either, as he had known them all their lives, and would sincerely dislike having to kill them, too.”] ROFLMAO! You put two conflicting thoughts together and make them bring out a response that is so completely opposite of what one might expect. I wish that I could view things the way you do. My life might actually be a lot more fun!
[“Sesshomaru decided happily that he was really, really, really, going to enjoy this.”] I love that you give Sesshoumaru emotions that appear to be so natural. And funny as well.
[“Not at all because he would dearly love to have more things to eviscerate.”] LOL Can’t breath…The imagery of an evil grin inside Sesshoumaru’s head just kills me. LOL
Keichi’s death was so violent and very, very satisfying. Oh yeah! Torture the bastard! I’m with you on that one! “…dulcet tones of a treacherous soul in torment.” Awesome phrasing! “…that he was kissed by the gods, indeed.” You word things so well!
[[“Oh, rapture.”]] I literally laughed out loud here.
[[“…his soul singing at the destruction and carnage, and mind flashing happily to the bloody, gooey Keichi probably still writhing in pain on his gardens’ grass.”]] He really leads the good life. LOL Wow, you knew where the apostrophe on ‘gardens’ belonged! I’m impressed!
[“ They tended to throw themselves at him, arms open, because...he was Sesshomaru.”] How wonderfully conceited!
[“she might actually hit him if she threw them all at him, and how would he ever live with that shame?] Sesshoumaru? Shamed by a woman? Unbelievable!? LOL
[“hoping to all the gods above that she would not; one, incinerate him with her holy ki, and two, raise her knee in any way or with any speed.”] Literally laughed out loud. Nice to know that he remembers her ability to torch him. And I love the verbs that you choose!
[“Sesshomaru knew, as he clamped his palm to her mouth, that he had never in his long days ever met someone so enamoured of the spoken word.”] “Enamoured” Another excellent verb. You really do utilize the English vocabulary well. I cannot claim that you are repetitive. ^_^
[“Sesshomaru almost fell out of his skin when she did.”] That picture did make me chuckle.
[“Well, he wasn’t. He almost had a heart attack.
Because a lick was akin to the humans’ practice of kissing.”] Sesshoumaru? A heart attack? LOL again! You shock us with his responses. Oooooh, she kissed him!? What is he going to do about it!?
[“…Rants are necessary to uphold sanity… It didn’t seem to be helping her.”] I love the running gag of him always questioning her sanity. That is so much fun!
I chuckled at the comment about her not being able to feel the same emotion for more than ten seconds. Another theme running throughout the fic. You’re really keeping this together well. How you use it when you bring them together will be interesting.
[“He just could not stop baiting her. He liked to live dangerously.”] Another real LOL
[“However, seeing as he was Sesshomaru, after all, he was fairly certain that he could persuade her to let him lean forward and nibble her deliciously plump lip, then lick-
“How about that, let-go-of-Kagome-plan?” she stammered.”] Another LOL at his thoughts and her untimely interruption.
“mucked” Great verb and applying it to Sesshoumaru made it humorous. “humorous” You’d think that I would learn a new word too. Heh, I just learned about Word’s thesaurus today. Maybe that will help!
[“…And he had the sinking feeling that it had very little to do with his debt of honour.”] Imagining Sesshoumaru with a ‘sinking feeling’ provoked another wide grin.
[“But damn, he was good.”] Another wide grin.
[“…careful to keep his suddenly wandering thoughts centred on protecting, not molesting, her.”] Chuckle
[“And if he got to annoy that blustering ball of fur he had the misfortune to call a brother...well...life occasionally had its perks.”] Wide grin.
I am not going to make a to-do about the small errors because the joy of reading this chapter overwhelms them. My face is now sore from smiling so much. Thanks for leaving my day on a bright note.
I know that I repeated a lot of your chapter. Let me tell you, it was difficult not to repeat the entire thing! Great job!
Snow
[“Even better, he was well on his way to scratching his proverbial murdering itch.
All he had to do now was locate Keichi.”] Oh, that was just too good. That whole beginning scene involving Sesshoumaru’s plummet to the earth was great for your setup of Sesshoumaru’s personality. I love his violent side and you do it so well.
OMG! That rat thought that he could set himself up in Sesshoumaru’s place!? My blood is boiling now!
[““And which proof would that be? As far as I can tell, I’m quite alive.” Sesshomaru was glad to note that his guards had not betrayed him either, as he had known them all their lives, and would sincerely dislike having to kill them, too.”] ROFLMAO! You put two conflicting thoughts together and make them bring out a response that is so completely opposite of what one might expect. I wish that I could view things the way you do. My life might actually be a lot more fun!
[“Sesshomaru decided happily that he was really, really, really, going to enjoy this.”] I love that you give Sesshoumaru emotions that appear to be so natural. And funny as well.
[“Not at all because he would dearly love to have more things to eviscerate.”] LOL Can’t breath…The imagery of an evil grin inside Sesshoumaru’s head just kills me. LOL
Keichi’s death was so violent and very, very satisfying. Oh yeah! Torture the bastard! I’m with you on that one! “…dulcet tones of a treacherous soul in torment.” Awesome phrasing! “…that he was kissed by the gods, indeed.” You word things so well!
[[“Oh, rapture.”]] I literally laughed out loud here.
[[“…his soul singing at the destruction and carnage, and mind flashing happily to the bloody, gooey Keichi probably still writhing in pain on his gardens’ grass.”]] He really leads the good life. LOL Wow, you knew where the apostrophe on ‘gardens’ belonged! I’m impressed!
[“ They tended to throw themselves at him, arms open, because...he was Sesshomaru.”] How wonderfully conceited!
[“she might actually hit him if she threw them all at him, and how would he ever live with that shame?] Sesshoumaru? Shamed by a woman? Unbelievable!? LOL
[“hoping to all the gods above that she would not; one, incinerate him with her holy ki, and two, raise her knee in any way or with any speed.”] Literally laughed out loud. Nice to know that he remembers her ability to torch him. And I love the verbs that you choose!
[“Sesshomaru knew, as he clamped his palm to her mouth, that he had never in his long days ever met someone so enamoured of the spoken word.”] “Enamoured” Another excellent verb. You really do utilize the English vocabulary well. I cannot claim that you are repetitive. ^_^
[“Sesshomaru almost fell out of his skin when she did.”] That picture did make me chuckle.
[“Well, he wasn’t. He almost had a heart attack.
Because a lick was akin to the humans’ practice of kissing.”] Sesshoumaru? A heart attack? LOL again! You shock us with his responses. Oooooh, she kissed him!? What is he going to do about it!?
[“…Rants are necessary to uphold sanity… It didn’t seem to be helping her.”] I love the running gag of him always questioning her sanity. That is so much fun!
I chuckled at the comment about her not being able to feel the same emotion for more than ten seconds. Another theme running throughout the fic. You’re really keeping this together well. How you use it when you bring them together will be interesting.
[“He just could not stop baiting her. He liked to live dangerously.”] Another real LOL
[“However, seeing as he was Sesshomaru, after all, he was fairly certain that he could persuade her to let him lean forward and nibble her deliciously plump lip, then lick-
“How about that, let-go-of-Kagome-plan?” she stammered.”] Another LOL at his thoughts and her untimely interruption.
“mucked” Great verb and applying it to Sesshoumaru made it humorous. “humorous” You’d think that I would learn a new word too. Heh, I just learned about Word’s thesaurus today. Maybe that will help!
[“…And he had the sinking feeling that it had very little to do with his debt of honour.”] Imagining Sesshoumaru with a ‘sinking feeling’ provoked another wide grin.
[“But damn, he was good.”] Another wide grin.
[“…careful to keep his suddenly wandering thoughts centred on protecting, not molesting, her.”] Chuckle
[“And if he got to annoy that blustering ball of fur he had the misfortune to call a brother...well...life occasionally had its perks.”] Wide grin.
I am not going to make a to-do about the small errors because the joy of reading this chapter overwhelms them. My face is now sore from smiling so much. Thanks for leaving my day on a bright note.
I know that I repeated a lot of your chapter. Let me tell you, it was difficult not to repeat the entire thing! Great job!
Snow
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September 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG, I love this story! Your Sesshomaru is exactly like I always thought of him! I really, Really love this, and I can't wait untill the next chapter! Here's hoping that the Time and Oppourtunity Gods will be merciful.
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August 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Loved it so much!!!
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August 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 11:
Oh Yeah! That was pretty funny. Heheh, you don't interrupt a female's rant. Smushing her lips together was cute. Throwing pebbles at Sesshoumaru is a foolishly brave thing to do. I think that Kagome's foolhardiness and Sesshoumaru's reluctantance to kill her is very entertaining. Kudos. Shoot, not even an accidental lime. *pouts*. I've been pretty lazy and scottishfae has said everything in her review that I had to say so, yeah, that.
I did want to say that I like the way that you started off the fic with Sesshoumaru admiring Kagome's physical attributes. He might have been tempted to earlier if he and Inuyasha hadn't been trying to kill each other. You set it up very nicely. Just because he is supposed to despise humans, doesn't mean that he wouldn't fantasize about forbidden candy. Heheh. You portray this very nicely.
I see that you have your italics now. Yes, I agree they are nice. Thanks for giving us smiles and laughter; much appreciated.
Snow
Oh Yeah! That was pretty funny. Heheh, you don't interrupt a female's rant. Smushing her lips together was cute. Throwing pebbles at Sesshoumaru is a foolishly brave thing to do. I think that Kagome's foolhardiness and Sesshoumaru's reluctantance to kill her is very entertaining. Kudos. Shoot, not even an accidental lime. *pouts*. I've been pretty lazy and scottishfae has said everything in her review that I had to say so, yeah, that.
I did want to say that I like the way that you started off the fic with Sesshoumaru admiring Kagome's physical attributes. He might have been tempted to earlier if he and Inuyasha hadn't been trying to kill each other. You set it up very nicely. Just because he is supposed to despise humans, doesn't mean that he wouldn't fantasize about forbidden candy. Heheh. You portray this very nicely.
I see that you have your italics now. Yes, I agree they are nice. Thanks for giving us smiles and laughter; much appreciated.
Snow