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for Hindsight

by Titaness

person Jen
schedule October 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey I was just reading your fic, still haven't finished the chapters yet, and in chapter 5 and 6 there is just a small grammar mix up. In the sentence - "Perhaps because you change your emotional state every three seconds?" he asked dryly. Should be "Perhaps because you change your emotional state every three seconds" he said dryly. If you don't think so try reading the whole chapter, I really thin it would make more sense. It just doesnt make sense as a question, it's more of a statement.
person madmiko
schedule October 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This story is SO funny! It's very well-written. I love your take on Sesshoumaru. But, did you really have to make me make such a fool out of myself because I was sitting in front of my computer laughing my head off like an idiot? Everyone else in the house kept giving me disgusted looks, and kept interrupting my enjoyment of the story by asking, "What the hell is so funny?" I can't wait for your next posting!
person cm34
schedule September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
very nice
person Anon
schedule September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
but it should have been white and red not just red ok thanks
person cm34
schedule September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
now you ended 2 really nice chapters the same way thats not nice
person cm34
schedule September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
your good
person cm34
schedule September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
lives up to its name completely
person cm34
schedule September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
sesshoumaru needs to be more forward one day and kagome needs to shut up and let him preferably at the same moment
person cm34
schedule September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
good writing makes for good reading
person cm34
schedule September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
still gifted but tired of waiting