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August 1, 2019 at 12:00 AM
Please continue it's an awesome story can't wait to see what's wrong with Kagome and to see what Inuyasha has up his sleeve with the package and laptop thing Plus dying to see who's the one that called Kagome on the phone in her apartment
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January 27, 2017 at 12:00 AM
Good story but abandoned to bad
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April 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really got into your story.. I just have to know what Inuyasha is up to with his lap top and package....
and Kagome with that phone call. I truly hope you start updating again. It would be ashame not to finish..
I know a little thing called life does tend to get in the way... I'll keep checking back.
and Kagome with that phone call. I truly hope you start updating again. It would be ashame not to finish..
I know a little thing called life does tend to get in the way... I'll keep checking back.
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December 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ohhhh, that was pure evil right there!! Update soon cause I can't wait to find out whats wrong with Kagome not to mention I want to know who that guy was that called her. PLEASE HURRY!!!!
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November 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
cmon please update i love reading this story its my fave
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November 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i really like reading this fan fic and i hope you keep updating i love it. and i hope you update soon.
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October 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Alright, so all I did was actually skim your story, the summary looked good, but when I got through the first paragraph I was not happy. I can see that you can write well, but you do not do it correctly! There are rules to writing and the simplest of them you have abused!
When you are writing dialogue, you do not use a '. You use quotations! Like this:
"Hey Sango!" she waved.
Then, you skip a line because you always start a new line when ending paragraphs, and dialogue is considered a paragraph.
I was taught this rule in 6th grade, the latest grade to be learning this would be in 7th or maybe even 8th, but that's the farthest it goes. You obviously have not finished school, and are not capable of writing a sex story, and are not even at the age to write one! If you want to read about sex so much, then read them and let the real writer's write! Sex is good, yes. But not for children!
When you are writing dialogue, you do not use a '. You use quotations! Like this:
"Hey Sango!" she waved.
Then, you skip a line because you always start a new line when ending paragraphs, and dialogue is considered a paragraph.
I was taught this rule in 6th grade, the latest grade to be learning this would be in 7th or maybe even 8th, but that's the farthest it goes. You obviously have not finished school, and are not capable of writing a sex story, and are not even at the age to write one! If you want to read about sex so much, then read them and let the real writer's write! Sex is good, yes. But not for children!
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September 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You should make sure and start a new paragraph each time a new person speaks. It makes the story easier to read.
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September 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
YESSS. u finaly updated, I was thinking that you were never going to. thank u. I loved the 3 chapters and I will be looking for your updates.
Peace & Love BastardOmega
Peace & Love BastardOmega
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September 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I know this story it is similar to one that i read on Sesshomaru and rin from Chibexplosion
but it is still good though
but it is still good though