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March 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting story...but, it should had been spaced out better. It was really hard to read in a way. And I guess this was a one shot ....but things progress just way to fast, it would have been better as chapters. That way you could have developed the characters alot more. And there were a lot of typos, I normally wouldn't say anything, but there was just to many....But, all in all good love story....keep up the writing....