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please update soon onegai

you need to put more detail into the chapters. its gets odd when you see sesshoumaru said inuyasha said kagome said. try something like sesshoumaru and inuyasha looked at kagome while she was talking. something like that. its not a bad story but i think that you should get someone to help you just a little. Look at some other fics to that might help some.

interseting so Kagome was bitten by Sessh..or something...LOL...interesting beginning:D

This would be good if you added more detail to it. Seriously, I feel nothing of this fic. You have an OK, start so far; but have you considered going further than OK? I don't know if i'm making any sense though. HM, but yeah. Well, "White outfit" won't do. I'm referring to how you described Sesshou's clothing. I'm a full on SEsshoumaru/Kagome fan, and I'm totally with these types of stories. But I like very, detailed fictions. I'll come and check up on this fic, and if you need a beta; you could e-mail me. I'd be happy enough to go over your work. =)

ok...interesting...LOL...Great chapter...hehehe...oh man, THANKS:D can't wait for the next chapter:D

First off it is spelled Kagome... NOT... Kogome. Second you need to fix your story to have paragraphs and better grammer. The first chapter is one big paragraph and very hard to read. And your summary needs to be fixed it has other spelling errors besides Kagome's name. Think about getting a beta to help you out this could be a good story.

Please finish i want to know what is going to happen

You may want to fix your summary.