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thats was really good, keep it up

Yea, you updated! well bye, bye ^__^

Not bad so far. Hiei is a little OOC, but it's your fic, so there's no harm done. In fact I think it's cute. I really like it. Update soon, ne?

Oh and uh, one more thing to Anon. It's her fic, let her write it how she wants to. If you don't like it don't read it. I can understand constructive criticism, like saying, "It might have been better if you used a different base plot, since this one is used a lot." BUt what you wrote was outright degradation. I'm sure if you were an author and you recieved a review like that you would do the same thing I am doing. Teaching you the difference between criticism and flames.

I like the story, but the fact that you abbrievate (that word makes me laugh) the words annoys the hell out of me.
instead of putting u, type you.
instead of wtf put what the fuck.
Also, my friend says don't put your personal oppinion in the middle of the story. ex. But who likes kuwabrawa (I don't)
I'm going to leave, my song is on.

Sorry but it sucks. Why don´t you start over with a real plot? Do you know how many stories are there with the same old -Kagome sees Inu with Kikyou and plans to kill her to give his dead lover her soul back- ? No? More than enough. It´s out of character for all three of them and just plain stupid. Try to write more realistic: Kikyou is not a bitch, Kagome is not a ninny and Inuyasha is not an asshole, just an idiot but he loves both women. If he could choose he would take Kagome. It would have been more believable if Kagome would be tired of waiting for Inu and starts to fall in love with someone else- and here comes Hiei.

Something like that would have been nice.

Hmmm! ^__^ I'd love to see more when you have it. You might want to fix some of the spelling errors.

Hey Sis,

Nice story. A few errors in spelling. But all in all, it's actually pretty great for the first chapter. Can't wait to read more. Ttyl..

Hey Sis,
Again chapter two and three, they're good. Real good. Can't wait to read more.
Ttyl.