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for A moment of love

by swedishkitsune

person Trollmia
schedule January 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hello there.

It's looking pretty nice.
Space it out a bit. It's a large piece of words you have to work yourself through and if you have trouble reading this can prove to be a challenge. So space it out. Paragraphs is a good thing. Oh, and I think you had a little bit of misspelling in the summery. I'm sure you can see what it is.. :)
Nice to read yuri every once in awhile and although I am not a fan of Kagome, it was good.

- Trollmia