rate_review Reviews

I really enjoyed what was written of this story. I was really sad to see that the date on it's last update was in 2010. I'd love to read more & see where it was going, I'm sorry it has been abandoned

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

please update quickly this fic kicks --- thank you

so far i love the story i cant wait till you add more i think i know whats gonna happen due to others ive read you should add a nice lemon and make it so inuyasha gets angry you can get good examples by reading a mikos wish it was 22 chapters but i dont know what happened i look forward to reading it

aww anothe cliffie

please update soon because i'm dieing to know who or what sesshomaru has come for.

love the story btw.

onegai update soon

ja ne

great story but what dose sesshomaru want?

Awwwwwwww! *Pouts.* Damn, another cliffy. *Starts to cry.*

i love this story can you make it longer ? plz up date soon

I cannot say were you are taking this story. It seems to be a premise that is used a great deal, but one I can never get bored of. I will be watching to see where your next installment leads us.

If I may, I would like to make a few suggestions for you. I know how nerve wracking it can be to put up your first fanfic, and there are a lot of things to adjust to.

Firstly I would start by lenghtening the chapters. Sometimes combining two chapters into one is the best way to do this, or simply extending your descriptions. Remember that while this story may be playing out in your head in vivid images, the readers are not privy to your conjurings. So always remember to paint the scene, delve into character psychology, and never forsake the all important issue of timing.

I think you will get better as you go along, and I am anxious to see how this develops. Please update often!!!

Awww, please do hurry with the next chapter. *Starts to cry.*