^_^ that was good keep it up ^_^

you know, you really can't seem to get your ideas out without them sounding overly... forced and rushed.

If i were you ... I would take the time to read something by Doggieearlover, Inufan625, or XxSangoxX.

They know how to write....
Just a suggestion.
I get irritated beyond words when people who THNK they can write try to and actually believe that they have literate fans. FYI, you have so many spelling and grammar errors I wanted to cry. And I don't even know if i can mention how OOC this is. DBZ? you've gotta be joking. This hasn't been done before because well... its just stupid.

PLEASE Don't write a lemon.

I hate this story so MUCH!

gahhhhhhhh

FLAME!!

Bitxh... dis storay is da fuckin bomb fo shiczzle. I did saw dat you gots two of dem autors nutes dough.
fshhh rite sum more da storay and put some poon in dis shiitz.

PEAZE!

Yeah, um, this was slightly what I would say NICELY to be ... A train wreck.
Your idea's are all over the place and I am getting a sense of Redundancy from these
'chapters' you have posted. The way you are portraying the characters is kind of an
insult to be quite honest. I would love to give you a positive review but... i just cannot think of
a plausable reason to do such a thing. I'm quite terrified to know how your lemon
will be portrayed... I dearly hope that you have some experience with that subject personally...
Because if you do not... It will probably be a train wreck with vulgar words.

I seriously feel like I wasted my time by even looking at this let alone reviewing.

What are you 10? your profile says 18 but... damn.

DBZ is such a child thing... my son watches it and hes 7

DBZ is for babies.

woulda been better if it was Howl.

Good fic, Can't wait to see what happens next, real interesting fic.
update soon.

Yay! ^_^ ur back ^_^ ~waves~

YEEEEEEES. now that's a story i want to have more of. but thanks for the cliffy, asshole, we didn't get a reaction of the kiss. u better update soon.

Peace & Love BastardOmega

Hey, sorry I have to go this route. Just letting you know i replied to your comment on my page. Story: Alisha.

By the way I love your stories, they are almost as addictive as Alisha !!! Keep it up... erm once March 1st rolls around.

Ciao

~Pixie Dust~