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for Hentai na Brothers

by Kaworu

person Crazy Fangirl 0098 Sesshy
schedule January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hmm...It's not bad...actually it's rather good! But you need work with your spellings and use pharagraphs!
person Polka dot
schedule January 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Do you have word or some other program with spell and grammer check on your computer? This needs to be rewritten badly. There are so many typos that it is difficult to get through a single sentence. I get the impression you didn't read over your work before posting it.