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January 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ok, heres my problem with your story: the way that kagoame, sango, and rin are acting, is not correct. i do not mean that they are acting out of character, but acting incorrectly had they indeed been held captive and such, as you have it. they would not be this....happy, i do not believe, and they would not be so welcoming to all this male attention, considering everyting that they have seen and been through. i do not htink you have written that acuratley. however, your story is not bad, i just think that it needs some work.
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January 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like it so far and thought that your first lemon was pretty good.
Maybe it's just me but I also specifially remember you writing that the girls told Narkau they were older so that he wouldn't be interested in them as sex slaves and so he just had them clenaing and such... Anyway keep working and ignore the flames.
Maybe it's just me but I also specifially remember you writing that the girls told Narkau they were older so that he wouldn't be interested in them as sex slaves and so he just had them clenaing and such... Anyway keep working and ignore the flames.
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January 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i noticed this chapter didnt say anything about rin and sess but it was still good. update soon!!!
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December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
SOOOO good!!! please keep it up :)
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December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great!!! (as usual!) keep those updates coming!!! cant wait for the next chappy!!
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December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Can't wait to see Miroku and Inuyasha 'convince' the girls to stay with them.
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December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Love this chapter. Keep up the good work!!!
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December 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
PLZ UPDATE!!!
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December 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That's just evil, not updating until after the New Year when the story is getting good (but understandable with the holidays).
Please update when you can.
Happy Holidays!!!
Please update when you can.
Happy Holidays!!!
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December 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow..what a cliffy o.o Tee hee hee. Update again sometimes ne? ^_^