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June 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Bless you for writing such a gorgeous fic and for sharing it with all the readers. Also thank you a million times for putting so much effort into the characterization. Too many of the "Inucest" stories involve sudden realizations of love and dewy eyes all around, you know? It's hardly plausible given what we know about the characters and their situations. But you delve deeply into the characters' psyches and examination their motivations and thought processes and every single word of it is totally believable. In one of the earlier chapters I laughed so hard at Sesshoumaru's rationalizations and in another (though I don't recall which) Inuyasha made a statement that was so HIM, it just bowled me over. This story is a gem in the category (and on the whole site, at that), and I'm very much looking forward to reading more. I rarely leave reviews (lazy!!! -.-;;), but I just had to tell you what a fantastic piece this is. It's so long, too! Extra gold stars for that, and even more for the lack of grammatical errors! It's just beautifully moving to see such a professionally executed and impeccably written fanfic.
I think I've rambled on long enough, but just a final note (though I realize you've probably already been informed of or somehow or other discovered the information for yourself) is that what you call Sesshoumaru's "fur accompaniment" (which I think is a terrific term for it) was referred to by Takahashi Rumiko in an interview (or some such thing) as "mokomoko-sama". I can definitely see why you wouldn't use that name for it, though, as it's highly doubtful any of the characters (except for perhaps Jaken and Rin) would ever refer to it as such.
Anyway, thanks again for the superb read. I'm eagerly anticipating the next installment. Best wishes!
I think I've rambled on long enough, but just a final note (though I realize you've probably already been informed of or somehow or other discovered the information for yourself) is that what you call Sesshoumaru's "fur accompaniment" (which I think is a terrific term for it) was referred to by Takahashi Rumiko in an interview (or some such thing) as "mokomoko-sama". I can definitely see why you wouldn't use that name for it, though, as it's highly doubtful any of the characters (except for perhaps Jaken and Rin) would ever refer to it as such.
Anyway, thanks again for the superb read. I'm eagerly anticipating the next installment. Best wishes!
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June 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well, what do you expect? Inuyasha and Sess were too yummy to be thinking of anyone else! Damn, this is starting to get like a drug for me. I haven't had any in a bit, and i'm getting restless. Loving it, bw. So keep going!
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June 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Your story is really good. The writing is good and the plot is too. I like the fact that it it a story and not just smut, you don't get much of those. My favorit character is deffinatly the witch, you did a great job with her. I can't wait for those beads to go, haha. Thanx for writing this and sharing it!
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June 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I've been reading this story for two days now and haven't been able to get enough of it. I don't really write reviews very much, so just bear with me cause i'm not all that good at them. I'll try to give you the best constructive critisism that I possibly can (please ignore the spelling too, <_< I'm not all that great at it.) I've also been thinking about what to say to you after i finished reading what you wrote in this after i finished reading it.
Most MPregs that I've ever read have never beed so elaborate in explaning how it was possible for the male that got pregnant, got pregnant. I love how you took on a known fact that some species, when in a single sex environment, will change sexes to continue the procreation of the species. I also love how you kept the flow of every chapter to be the same feel, even though some of it felt forced due to possible lack of inspiration, but after a while you could tell that the inspiration came back. Another thing I admired was your constant relations to how someone would feel in certain situations of verbal, emotional, and physical abuse, and how that might effect someone's psyche. I also liked how you didn't have constant smut in every chapter, that can get old sometimes afterall; but one of the things that i liked most was the ID, Ego, Super Ego inside of Inuyasha and the complete turmoil that can be caused by them arguing. I even liked how you let them turn into personalities of their own inside of him. I also liked how you captivated each character's characteristics with Kagome being annoying and oppressive as well as controlling, Miroku's letchery and knowing how to deal with issues that involved Inuyasha and Kagome, Shippo's obvious connection to Inuyasha and Kagome as his adoptive parents (i especially like that you actually know Shippo's full name too.) There were also some very humorus times, for example their reactions to Bokusanou's questions, that i thoroughly enjoyed and wanted to see more of, even though you can tell that this is supposed to be an angst related story, sometimes you need more humor to keep the reader from getting fully depressed.
Now for the critisism par that I'll try by best to help you fix if you fell like you want to.
Every once in a while, I continually had to replace "youki lord" with "Demon Lord" in my head. Normally I like to have youki refer to the spiritual side of the person, and demon to refer to the person themselves as a description of some sort. I noticed that there were many instances where you used youki in two different meanings in most of some of the paragraphs. I would like to see you brauden your creative writing skills by coming up with more adjetives to describe each characteristic than just youki. Another thing that even became remotely annoying was the backtrack of events when you changed point of view between characters, sometimes it felt like it ruined the flow you had going in the previous chapter and slowed the reader down a bit. In some chapters though (i forget which unfortunately) i noticed that you only backtracked to only moments before where you left off before getting back to the flow, which i felt to be in good taste because even though you were backtracking, you didn't have it feel like the person was reading the entire chapter beforehand again, but gave them a gist of where you left off. I'd like to see more of that than repeating the entire chapter again then starting on the new chapter, only to have it end shortly after you really got into it. It might even help with the creativity flow better if you continued to do that because you could possibly go even farther with your imagination.
Other than those two things that might not be too hard to work on, it was a very enjoyable story that I want to see more of. You're a very talented writer and you should never stop writing if someone tells you to. If you take people's constuctive critisism into account when you write, it could help you develope better skills as a writer, and no matter what that's a good thing. But never take someone saying "I hate this" and "I hate that" and "You suck at writing" without them telling you why they think that or help you try to fix it. It'll only bring your hopes and dreams down, and no one should have to go through that.
If you need any tips on how to get your inspiration going after some sort of writer's block but don't want to stop writing, i recamend going to Amelia Atwater-Rhodes website (http://www.randomhouse.com/features/atwaterrhodes/home.htm) for some tips. She can write some wonderful and beautiful novels (if you don't already know her work) and her advice to all writers is very helpful.
I really want to keep reading this story, so please, update ASAP.
And the tips in the constuctive critisism are optional, don't ever try to feel obligated to change what you do unless you think it's a good idea.
Most MPregs that I've ever read have never beed so elaborate in explaning how it was possible for the male that got pregnant, got pregnant. I love how you took on a known fact that some species, when in a single sex environment, will change sexes to continue the procreation of the species. I also love how you kept the flow of every chapter to be the same feel, even though some of it felt forced due to possible lack of inspiration, but after a while you could tell that the inspiration came back. Another thing I admired was your constant relations to how someone would feel in certain situations of verbal, emotional, and physical abuse, and how that might effect someone's psyche. I also liked how you didn't have constant smut in every chapter, that can get old sometimes afterall; but one of the things that i liked most was the ID, Ego, Super Ego inside of Inuyasha and the complete turmoil that can be caused by them arguing. I even liked how you let them turn into personalities of their own inside of him. I also liked how you captivated each character's characteristics with Kagome being annoying and oppressive as well as controlling, Miroku's letchery and knowing how to deal with issues that involved Inuyasha and Kagome, Shippo's obvious connection to Inuyasha and Kagome as his adoptive parents (i especially like that you actually know Shippo's full name too.) There were also some very humorus times, for example their reactions to Bokusanou's questions, that i thoroughly enjoyed and wanted to see more of, even though you can tell that this is supposed to be an angst related story, sometimes you need more humor to keep the reader from getting fully depressed.
Now for the critisism par that I'll try by best to help you fix if you fell like you want to.
Every once in a while, I continually had to replace "youki lord" with "Demon Lord" in my head. Normally I like to have youki refer to the spiritual side of the person, and demon to refer to the person themselves as a description of some sort. I noticed that there were many instances where you used youki in two different meanings in most of some of the paragraphs. I would like to see you brauden your creative writing skills by coming up with more adjetives to describe each characteristic than just youki. Another thing that even became remotely annoying was the backtrack of events when you changed point of view between characters, sometimes it felt like it ruined the flow you had going in the previous chapter and slowed the reader down a bit. In some chapters though (i forget which unfortunately) i noticed that you only backtracked to only moments before where you left off before getting back to the flow, which i felt to be in good taste because even though you were backtracking, you didn't have it feel like the person was reading the entire chapter beforehand again, but gave them a gist of where you left off. I'd like to see more of that than repeating the entire chapter again then starting on the new chapter, only to have it end shortly after you really got into it. It might even help with the creativity flow better if you continued to do that because you could possibly go even farther with your imagination.
Other than those two things that might not be too hard to work on, it was a very enjoyable story that I want to see more of. You're a very talented writer and you should never stop writing if someone tells you to. If you take people's constuctive critisism into account when you write, it could help you develope better skills as a writer, and no matter what that's a good thing. But never take someone saying "I hate this" and "I hate that" and "You suck at writing" without them telling you why they think that or help you try to fix it. It'll only bring your hopes and dreams down, and no one should have to go through that.
If you need any tips on how to get your inspiration going after some sort of writer's block but don't want to stop writing, i recamend going to Amelia Atwater-Rhodes website (http://www.randomhouse.com/features/atwaterrhodes/home.htm) for some tips. She can write some wonderful and beautiful novels (if you don't already know her work) and her advice to all writers is very helpful.
I really want to keep reading this story, so please, update ASAP.
And the tips in the constuctive critisism are optional, don't ever try to feel obligated to change what you do unless you think it's a good idea.
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June 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
<_< I guess it got cut off, and I had a really good review too.
If you want to know what I said just e-mail me at littlesilverrose@gmail.com
If you want to know what I said just e-mail me at littlesilverrose@gmail.com
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June 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Mshutts does it again!
Man I didn't realize I missed so many chapters when the site was down..over 18 chapters. Well I'm caught up now...and I have to admit you haven't lost your stride/pacing telling this story.
To answer that question at the end of #46, yeah I DID forget about Kagome & Co., but I'm glad 'Yasha is awake.
Now for the fun part, disappointment 'Kagome' style...sometimes that character annoys me, probably the way people wirte about her, but I know for a fact I'm sick of the way she uses those damn beads to win an argument over Inuyasha.
Speaking of beads, you wouldn't any chance feel like writing that 'Sesshoumaru snapped the beads off Inuyasha's neck, because he wouldn't allow such disrespect.' Just a thought...
anyway..nuff' said.
Man I didn't realize I missed so many chapters when the site was down..over 18 chapters. Well I'm caught up now...and I have to admit you haven't lost your stride/pacing telling this story.
To answer that question at the end of #46, yeah I DID forget about Kagome & Co., but I'm glad 'Yasha is awake.
Now for the fun part, disappointment 'Kagome' style...sometimes that character annoys me, probably the way people wirte about her, but I know for a fact I'm sick of the way she uses those damn beads to win an argument over Inuyasha.
Speaking of beads, you wouldn't any chance feel like writing that 'Sesshoumaru snapped the beads off Inuyasha's neck, because he wouldn't allow such disrespect.' Just a thought...
anyway..nuff' said.
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June 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I usually don't get into stories like this, with the incest :P I come to amuse myself... but this story is REALLY well written. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Made me sad to find that it stopped at this one :(. MORE MORE I WANT MORE! :D
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June 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow I really love the way you write. This whole story makes perfect sense to me, Please continue with it.
-Tsuki-
-Tsuki-
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June 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
its still good and i liked it. :)
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June 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Don't worry abou the mushy stuff. At this point Inuyasha desevse a little mush. Hell. Alot of mush, he has after all, had a fairly unmushy life, especialy where Sesh is concerned. So bring on the mush!! They'd make a cute couple if Sesh could just pull his head out of his ass, which he seems to be starting to do. YAY .... and don't worry about colloquial anachronisms in their speech, the show does it all the time, and if it gets your point across adequatly, then who cares, not me, I'm loving it more and more each update. YAY Keep up the excellent work. Can't wait to see what happens with Kagome when she finds out, I kinda expect the S**T to hit the fan. In my secret heart I want Sesh to see her sit Inu and get truly pissed and threaten to kill her if she doesn't remove the rosary. I have this image in my head of Kagome taking the rosary off Inu with Sesh standing behind her, hand wrapped around her neck, claws leaking poison. And Inu not saying anything about her being in danger because, heh heh, she's finally taking that DAMN thing off his neck. Or maybe that's just me, anyway, if there's anything I can do to help just let me know, I love your work.