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May 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Ugh you abbanoned the story just when it was getting good grrr I know this is prob hopeless to ask but please update it I really do enjoy it
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May 1, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I really like the story line super sad that it has not been updated in years
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April 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I hope you decide to finish this story!
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September 27, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Love the story. Want more ASAP.
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September 21, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Alright I'm gonna be completely honest about the story. I could not get pass chapter thirty for multiple reasons.
I was already weary of this story from the get-go because it revolved around male pregnancy. Sorry but that type of story isn't my cup of tea. However I was willing to give this story a shot because of the high reviews it received. Perhaps this could sway my perspective a bit on this subject. It almost did if it wasn't for the fact that you drew this story out way too long.
As I read the story I noticed how much of the story reflects on the previous chapter. In my opinion it's way too much and unnecessary. When it comes to perspective you want to illustrate how one person feels about one event or another. But to do the whole event in another perspective in each chapter it feels like I'm repeatedly reading the same thing twice or three times in a row. It is a painfully slow progression. Dare I say you could have done the whole thing in the authors prospective, save yourself some time, and move on with the plot. This whole story could be reduced to fifteen chapters. From where I stop, I can see six chapters out of it.
You manage to get Sesshomaru's character down. My issue resides in InuYasha. He is way too docile and meek. I get that you'd want him to be submissive and passive, but he could have at least put up a fight. He took the whole 'I can get pregnant' thing way too easily, and that bothers me. InuYasha would have been more hot headed then that. You could have have him fighting it at first and then residing to his fate instead of having him subjugated right off.
But here's an idea to play with. I remember how you had a fox lord from the east talk to Sesshomaru. Keep in mind Koga is also from the east. There's something to go with. Unless you don't like Koga that much the scrap it.
That is all I have to say. All in all, it has potential. It's just way too long and repetitive.
Peace Out
~Riuka
I was already weary of this story from the get-go because it revolved around male pregnancy. Sorry but that type of story isn't my cup of tea. However I was willing to give this story a shot because of the high reviews it received. Perhaps this could sway my perspective a bit on this subject. It almost did if it wasn't for the fact that you drew this story out way too long.
As I read the story I noticed how much of the story reflects on the previous chapter. In my opinion it's way too much and unnecessary. When it comes to perspective you want to illustrate how one person feels about one event or another. But to do the whole event in another perspective in each chapter it feels like I'm repeatedly reading the same thing twice or three times in a row. It is a painfully slow progression. Dare I say you could have done the whole thing in the authors prospective, save yourself some time, and move on with the plot. This whole story could be reduced to fifteen chapters. From where I stop, I can see six chapters out of it.
You manage to get Sesshomaru's character down. My issue resides in InuYasha. He is way too docile and meek. I get that you'd want him to be submissive and passive, but he could have at least put up a fight. He took the whole 'I can get pregnant' thing way too easily, and that bothers me. InuYasha would have been more hot headed then that. You could have have him fighting it at first and then residing to his fate instead of having him subjugated right off.
But here's an idea to play with. I remember how you had a fox lord from the east talk to Sesshomaru. Keep in mind Koga is also from the east. There's something to go with. Unless you don't like Koga that much the scrap it.
That is all I have to say. All in all, it has potential. It's just way too long and repetitive.
Peace Out
~Riuka
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March 12, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I've not just got through reading this again for the fifth time! lol I love this story so much. I have never read a Inuyasha/Sesshomaru fic that is as beautiful as this. I love reading this. Please write some more. I really want to see all of Inuyasha finally except Sesshomaru. I just want Inuyasha to finally let go of the past (it happened so it can't change) and make the decision to start over with Sesshomaru.
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January 15, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I found this about...3 days ago. I love it, it seems like one of the few stories that still remain true to the characters. Everybody seems to hate Kagome, which I absolutely understand. Your way of getting rid of her was good.
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December 26, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Ack! Is this story perm. abandoned?
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November 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I just found this, and I love this story. Congratulations on the new baby and home! I can't wait for Inuyasha to tell Sesshomaru that he's pregnant!
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August 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I just started reading. I am happy that the plot is holding my attention. Can't wait to get the next chapter. Will try to have more critique next review. Thanks for the good read.