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for Breaking of A "True" Heart

by DaughterofNyght

person Alkira Zane
schedule December 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I'm so happy you got it back up! Yeah!!!!! I really like how it's going. Please tell me you're gonna rewrite chapter one and post it. I didn't get a chance to save it to my computer before the glitch wiped it. I'm really anticipating how this story is gonna go. Thanks for such great writing. ^_^
person Anonymous
schedule December 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This might be a good story, and seems to have a reasonably good beginning, although without the first chapter being reposted it is difficult to say. You might want to check the spelling on your chapter, especially for things like youaki, and inu youaki...the correct spelling for both is youkai, and inu youkai. Fixing something like this early on in your fic, and help to keep flamers from coming down on you later. Please update soon.
person Goddness of Evil
schedule December 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The story was great. Please continue with your story.