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person Anonymous
schedule December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Geeze! What a good storie! I lik it!
person Jonatan (Lill's earlier little boyfiend)
schedule December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hmmmm....To Lill: Please forgive me? *maks puppy eyes*
person Lill
schedule December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
To Jonatan: DARN THOSE PUPPY EYES! *Sigh* Fine! I forgive you! Now leave me alone!


Heh....MELIKE! ^_^ Update this Heavenly story soon please!
person Naraku's mistress who ties him to the bed and rides him till he bleeds...
schedule December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You have to update! This story is so good it leaves me dying for more!
Now I have some buissness to take care of...Hehehehhh....
*Kidnaps Naraku, ties him to the bed and rides him till his cock bleeds*
person Anon
schedule December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not to be annoying, but Rin means "companion", not "cold". I like your story, by the way. Hope you update soon ^^
person crazy fangirl
schedule December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I LUV SESSHY!!! THIS IS GREAT!
UPDATE!
I LUV SESSHY! *ties him to the bed and rides him till his cock is sore*
person Kaorustalker30
schedule December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*makes weird choking sounds* Did you not know it was finals week?! (*snort* As if I was studying) Shame on you for updating so fast! Another long one!

Oh. My. Fucking. God. *stares* Throughout the whole 5th chapter, I was trying to figure out whether I found Sesshomaru drool-worthy, or psycho-scary as shit. *shiver* Something that screwed me up: when Sesshomaru slammed Inuyasha into the wall *growl*, the closet women's liberationist in me totally protested (until I got it through my mind that they are MALE DEMONS); whereas, on the other hand, the (not-so-in-the-closet) deviant in me screamed, "VICTORY!" Another part of me (am I tri-polar?) thinks that Sesshomaru is a total whack-job, I mean, how dare he treat his mate like that?! What happened to 'protect, love, and only harm when absolutely necessary'? I don't mind the molesting, that was hot, it's the "You will obey me" shit that would have me "Kaze no Kizu"ing Sesshomaru's Ass. I don't have to obey shit until we're mated, so he could go slamming as many demons as he wants into the dirt. The Bastard. *blinks* Hehe

Side note: Thanks for that little "Lord of the Dance" excerpt lol I swear, I seriously kept thinking that. And with Inuyasha in the 5th chapter, I also kept thinking of him shouting "WHY IN THE 9 HELLS AM I GOING THROUGH THIS?!" lol Poor Yasha-kun. With Sesshomaru, you're doing a good job (even though I particularly favor your portrayal of Inuyasha), the way to do Sesshomaru (ooh, naughty) is not by action, but by thought. Sesshomaru is the equivalent of a blank slate, he rarely shows anything other than anger or discomfort (I particularly loved that episode with the panther demons - when he got bitch slapped [as my best guy friend related to me, amidst my peels of laughter] by the leader of the panther tribe. Now *that* was prime angry Sesshomaru!) I'd recommend POV switches to bring Sesshomaru's character out a bit, but it's entirely your call. Since we get to see Inuyasha's POV, in chap. 5 we viewed Sesshomaru as a possessive asshole, but from Sesshomaru's own thoughts, it most likely will be different - some unbridled emotion that welled up in his chest that he could just not deny - the need to make Inuyasha his. And the need to *show* Inuyasha that as his mate, there would be loyalty. *shrugg* I should stop plotting now lmao Bah, back to ignoring my finals.
person Atocha
schedule December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That had so better not be the end...i need them to mate...bwahahahhahaha
person Lill
schedule December 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
LOL!

As always: I LOVED IT!

Heh...I managed to by an 'accident' do something to Jonatan's computer.
So he won't be able to use it for a LONG time! Meheheheheheheh...*Grins evilly*

To Jonatan: EAT THAT SUCKER!

Heh...MELIKE! ^_^
person Jonatan (Lill's little boyfiend)
schedule December 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
To Lill: Sorry, hunny! But I forgot to tell you I was going to get a new computr anyway!
So now I can keep telling you how much I luv you! KISS ME!