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Well I don't recall the first one, but this is interesting, though I don't see any conflict arising.

Interesting veryinteresting please please please update
I love your story alot but will it have some sot of story line and you HAVE to torture them alittle:P

i wanted to know more. will sesshomaru see the letter. what will happen to inuyasha?

I like it. Updates soon kay?

hey, i read the original version and i don't know why you would think people
didn't like. i liked it. i thought it was great. but this new vesion as peeked my
interest as well. who put a sleep spell on sesshomaru? and why has inuyasha left
all of a sudden.

lovely ^^

Come on Isis we need more chap lol but great story non the less .....

I think your story is fairly good. You can make it better by making the plot more complex. The reason you gave as to why Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru are to be together, according to their father, is over used. So, you might want to find an alternative reasoning. Also, if you can adapt more of Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru's real characters from the anime and manga into the story, it will make the story more appealing and unique. Very few can actually do it properly and it definitely can enhance the story. I am only trying to give you constructive feedback because you are rewriting your story and want to improve it. So, use the ideas if you like them. I don’t mind if you don’t like them or use them. So, good luck and bye!
p.s. I also read the first version and made comments on points that were carried from the previous version and still have spaces for improvement.

Oh, I like the whole sleep spell thing. That's new. Can't wait to read more.