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January 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
CAN YOU WRiTE MORE PLEASE!! I WANNA READ MORE!
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November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think this story could be interesting....
I suggest you rewrite it and go a bit slower with telling the story
I suggest you rewrite it and go a bit slower with telling the story
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November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ok well, it started out pretty good and I still look forward to future chapters, however if I may suggest perhaps a little more character and plot development. I realize you are probably anxious to get to the good parts and therefore don't want to spend too much time on development, but you know sometimes that extra time spent can mean the difference between a story like 'Love' by baby girl, or one of Vivian or Ryukotsuei's stories. I think you have a lot of potential to become an excellent writter if you would just spend a little more time on your work. Looking forward to your next chapter.
P.S. This is not a flame. I'm trying to get you to reach new heights in your writing, and the best way to do that is write more. So hop to it.
P.S. This is not a flame. I'm trying to get you to reach new heights in your writing, and the best way to do that is write more. So hop to it.
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November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like it! And I loved the third chapter!
Heheh...Cause Sesshy was mentioned in that one...Heheh..
*Grins evilly*
Anyway: MELIKE! ^_^
Keep up the good work!
Heheh...Cause Sesshy was mentioned in that one...Heheh..
*Grins evilly*
Anyway: MELIKE! ^_^
Keep up the good work!