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November 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awww this is getting so good!!update real soon.IM just like Kagome. but my room or my obbession isnt that carzy. But i would love to kiss Inuyasha!!.. LOL welll UPATE A.S.A.P.
thanks,
Inuyashas Mate
thanks,
Inuyashas Mate
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November 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You have serious grammar and spelling issues. You don't know when to make a new paragraph. Two people should never talk in the same paragraph. You make yours way too long to be easy to read. Look at a paperback novel by your favorite writer and see how the paragraphs are broken up. They are usually short.
Fix your problems and maybe I will read your story, even though you seem to be underage.
Fix your problems and maybe I will read your story, even though you seem to be underage.
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November 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
There should be a blank line between paragraphs too.
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November 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
roar! update!! ... and try to make your chapters a bit longer, theyre quite short, and i dont like that...but whatever, update soon please!!!
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November 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is so great... It;s hilarious and I can't wait for more.
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November 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like where this is going!!! You should continue on it some more....
i really want to know what happens next!!!
cant wait!!! HURRY UP ON IT WE ARE WAITING!!!
please
i really want to know what happens next!!!
cant wait!!! HURRY UP ON IT WE ARE WAITING!!!
please
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November 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
love it! love it! love it!
srry i didn't review the first chap i was at Washington D.C.
and my laptop didn't work at all :(
TTFN;
megan
srry i didn't review the first chap i was at Washington D.C.
and my laptop didn't work at all :(
TTFN;
megan
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November 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good start so far and I hope that you continue with it. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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November 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ok, I'm intregued keep going :)