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whoa it cant happen like that i
mean not to sess but i hope you
update this story soon i want to
know what will happen next

REVIEW ON CHAPTER 1:

I love your story -^-^- I live in Chicago w00t ! And I'm asian >_> But only 1/3 Japanese.

Exactly, like you said, many Japanese hate to be mistaken for Chinese, etc. because they are racist (like the ones who mistake their identity) and think Chinese are below them. Like Rin says in here, "I ain’t no mothafuckin chink", which implies she's racist, and thinks she, being Japanese, is way above a "chink" in the social hierachy. Which makes her a major hypocrite, BTW.

hey...im not the type of guy to complain..but your september 22 is far now..so how and when is comming the next chapter...maybe im puting a little to much pressure but still I love your story so keep update and keep it good! ( good do I now that, that is not simple but I trust you ) see ya

I nearly cried. It was that bad. To be honest, I didn't really read through the entire "slang" section, I couldn't really make myself do it. I couldn't put myself through that sort of torture. It was like... migrains in word form. Or needles stabbing my brain through my eyes in word form. Something along those lines.

As for the racial thing, it was bad. There's around 10 paragraphs of text above my comment to let you know exactly what I think of you, and the whole racism thing. But one point that I must make is this: although you may be African American, and although you may have been oppressed in history, pretty much everyone for some reason or another has as well. That does not make being ignorant about other racial issues beyond your own okay. Read up on it.

Odie: If everyone could just "get over" issues, we wouldn't have war now would we? The War in Iraq wouldn't happened if USA just "got over" 9.11. Or what about WW1? If Austria got over the Black Hand killing their Archduke, WW1 wouldn't have happened. And tell family friends that had family killed and raped in the Japanese invasion of Nanjing to just "get over it." I'm not saying that I'm against Japanese people, I'm part Japanese somewhere along the line, I've come to get over it.

Tense, sentence structure, grammar, vocabulary all need improvement. Consider getting a beta, or read over your stories again. I can't think of anyone that is stupid enough or masochistic enough to do it, but I'm sure there's SOMEONE out there that can do it.

Wow, your story is very interesting.
But i think the slang and such is a bit too much.
I m african american and korean, and I think this whole racial thing is a bit too much. People, get over it. Its not that big of a deal!
I think your story is very interesting.
I give you credit for still keeping this story up, and still writing this,while putting up with all this nonsense and crap people are giving you.
great job
:D

ahhhhhh!!!!!! THANK YOU!!!!!!!!

i am sure the next chapter will be just as breath taking as the other chapters...keep it up

i hope your not going to let it sit. if u are it was a great fic. its just to bad that its finished.

Ilove the story (day and night)
I'm hoping that something good will come up.
Like what would Kagura do when she finds out and stuff