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for Finding Completion

by kimisan

person are-en
schedule November 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG!! This story is the best.You must updated soon,urrr,could I be in your aleart list?Plss,plss,I don't want to miss this great story.I did not open the adult a/c because I'm too lazy and I promises to updated a review every chapter.OMG,this story rock.Plss put me under your alert.email me when u updated this story or new one :) Jya
schedule November 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was another AWESOME chapter but didn't he remember what Genkai said about her cervix???? OH well, FANTASTIC chapter...THANKS:D
person pms
schedule November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I guess I'm going against the flow of your other reviewers. This is not a flame, I just have a different view of what I'm reading. I wish Genkai had said a few more things to Yomi. Taking Kagome in a public place, while she voices objections in her head, just to prove a point to Yusuke and his friends was demeaning to Kagome. You state she feels embarrassed to have to face the others afterward. Well she's going to have to have contact with Yusuke for Lydon's sake. It will make it hard for her to deal with someone as strong as Yusuke if she's feeling shame or uncomfortable when she's around him. I am also beginning to question Yomi's feelings for Kagome. All these sit, stay or be punished commands makes it feel like she's his pet or possession. Maybe I just don't get all the dominator stuff, but as strong and courageous as Kagome is, I just can't see her being submissive. I'm sure as I read the rest of your story that I'll get my answers but I did want to voice a different opinion. You do a wonderful job of storytelling and tying up loose ends so I'll keep reading to see where you take us.
person azurephoenix
schedule November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was really interesting!!! I feel bad for Yusuke, but you snooze you lose
person lilly
schedule November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Alright vivian, You go girl. Another awesome chapter. I loved it. Please continue and update this story. I want to see how this one will end. I believe FindingCompletion is quickly becoming my favorite story on AFF.net. I can not wait to read more.
person swasdiva
schedule November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Maybe I'm a masochist, but Yomi has to be the hottest dominator I have ever read. Ho-ly hell, the way he talks is hot. *Fans self*

*Buys electric fan since paper doesn't do shit*

*Caves and sits in freezer*

Really, do men like that exist? If so, could someone please direct me? Seriously...I'm drooling. I never visibly drool. Unless I'm asleep, which doesn't count. Ho-ly hell...can't talk anymore...Yomi...too hot...

Okay, *blinks self out of trance* is that the fic's end??? That even though Yomi wins and gets the girl, Yusuke just gets the consolation prize of pissiness? I know, I know, make up your mind, Swas! I don't know! I simply adore Yomi/Kagome, but if you are adamant about this being Yusuke/Kagome I don't want you to give up on your dream!!! But hey, if it *is* the end, then after that lemon *begins...to slip...back into trance...* ~SLAP!~ Right, after that *ahem* yellow citrus fruit of erotic perfection, I'm quite content with Yomi gaining the many spoils from the tourney. I'll just miss the...uh...fruit. And hey, if this is the end, I'll go ahead and through in a request for more Yomi/Kags. You write them like no one else, I swear. Absolutely smutastic wondrously perfect chapter, 'natch!
person Kuramasgirl
schedule November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Loved the new chapter, it was awesome. I checked out the other reviews so far. And I totally disagree with PMS. Some people find having sex in a public place spontanious and exciting. And Yomi is a dominant person so to change him would make him OOC. So I think you are doing a great job with keeping in character. And Kags has put up with more degrading stuff from Inuyasha, what Yomi did was nothing compared to being called worthless and a bitch all the time. Keep up the good work.
person Vanessa
schedule November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Love the New Chapter. So what happens next will Yomi and Kagome stay in the city will Yusuke cause big problems will Kagome want to be with Yusuke again. so many questions running through my head.
person Kage Otome
schedule November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay! You updated! I've been watching this story for days, I must've bounced around for a full five minutes in exictement! And may I say, you did not dissapoint. Keep up the good work! Yomi/Kagome!!!
person PertyOne
schedule November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think it's great so far. I say Kuramasgirl has a point. I've seen all the YYH episodes and I think you are doing a great job of potraying Yomi. Besides having a man fuck you while taking control is very much hotness. Not to mention that Yomi is a youkai, he's not going to hand her roses and say "Kagome, will you please suck me off now?" You're doing great, keep it up!!!!