rate_review Reviews

hey what's going on with this fic i've been waiting so long for an update please tell me you did not abandon it :-(. it really is a great plot and has a lot of potential ^_^

This is the best fanfic I've ever read. I hope that you will add more chapters in the near future, I'm hooked and dying to read where Kag's & Aoshi's relationship lands! 5/5 ^^v

Out of curiosity, are you done with this story... cause i really like it and the interactions with the different characters are great, i think it would be awesome for it to have a finish and have the relationship drawn together, plus im curious as to how Kagome will go through her detective scenario... so as a reader, i would really like to finish out your story! :D

Thanks
~ Tink

hi are you ever going to update this fic? this is the best and only kagome/aoshi fic i've ever read and i'v been following it since you started writing it so if by chance u're not continuing please let me know cause this fic is really awsome. ^_^

hey this is a really great story please tell me you plan on updating it soon? i've been waiting for an update forever from u let me know what's up ok ^_^. One of your loyal fans Mina

i have been reading this story forever!! please update soon!!

I luv this fic, when r u going to update it? please update soon.

I love this story so much but you haven't updated in about 467 days, so I was wondering if you have discontinued this fic or if it on hold. I really hope that the aforementioned isn't true and that you've taken a slightly, okay really long time to continue with the fic. I hope to see updates for this fic soon! Ja matta.

YES!! rk/iy crossovers are extremely rare and this is a really well played and entertaining one! i like the almost strong almost confident bad mouthed kagome... she shows that kind of spirit in the series, the mouth would take a little while to acquire but i can see her talking like that. the explanation for her current attitude was intelligent and believable.

too bad you haven't updated in over a year, it's a good story and i would really love to see where you were planning to take it. if you can stir up some old muse to help complete this i would be one happy kitty!

thank you,
ginny

Hey, it's me again, another review. This time it's about the way the sentences in your writing are phrased. They're a little awkward, like you're speaking them outloud as opposed to writing them down. You'll cut out important words from the beginning of your sentence, such as "it". Instead of writing "It should be easier that way." You'll write "Should be easier that way." And while that's fine for dialog or speaking outloud, it can throw the reader off a lot, especially if the narrator isn't in first-person. I guess you could make the argument that a narrator in first-person could cut off the beginning of sentences, but definitely not in third-person.

And I also want you to know that the only reason I bother reviewing is because I think you've got a lot of potential. I realize this writing's from a few years back and you've most likely improved, but I just feel like I should actually give you a good critical review.