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October 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I understand that you may not have a word processor, but that is not really an excuse for posting un-edited fic. You could easily get a beta reader or a friend in the fandom to look over it for you. You really do have some potential and I hate to see it shadowed by mistakes that a beta could fix.
As far as the story’s content? Kudos to you for having a better understanding of rape than most rape!fic authors out there. Just because a victim may end up enjoying the experience, or would have consented to the person under different circumstances doesn’t mean it’s not rape. Inuyasha clearly DID rape her and it’s had an emotional impact.
The question of whether or not this fic is ordinary or extraordinary will only be answered as you build on this premise. In order to help you prevent that from happening, here is some advice…
Kagome is now, for all intents and purposes, a battered woman. She likely has some Stockholm syndrome thrown in there as well. When someone is held captive and raped/tortured, and their survival depends upon one person and making certain that they are appeased, the mind warps itself to help protect the heart. It’s a sticky situation and it’s one that is not often done well because it has so many facets. My advice is to research battered woman syndrome and Stockholm syndrome before continuing. Inuyasha was not himself and as such is partly removed from responsibility, but not *entirely* removed. He has a lot of amends to make and it needs to start by getting Kagome’s state of mind put back together.
This story could very well have a happy ending, but the characters will have to earn it. And now with a child in the mix, you’ll have to be that much more careful with your story’s dynamics.
I wish you the best of luck and look forward to seeing where you take this.
As far as the story’s content? Kudos to you for having a better understanding of rape than most rape!fic authors out there. Just because a victim may end up enjoying the experience, or would have consented to the person under different circumstances doesn’t mean it’s not rape. Inuyasha clearly DID rape her and it’s had an emotional impact.
The question of whether or not this fic is ordinary or extraordinary will only be answered as you build on this premise. In order to help you prevent that from happening, here is some advice…
Kagome is now, for all intents and purposes, a battered woman. She likely has some Stockholm syndrome thrown in there as well. When someone is held captive and raped/tortured, and their survival depends upon one person and making certain that they are appeased, the mind warps itself to help protect the heart. It’s a sticky situation and it’s one that is not often done well because it has so many facets. My advice is to research battered woman syndrome and Stockholm syndrome before continuing. Inuyasha was not himself and as such is partly removed from responsibility, but not *entirely* removed. He has a lot of amends to make and it needs to start by getting Kagome’s state of mind put back together.
This story could very well have a happy ending, but the characters will have to earn it. And now with a child in the mix, you’ll have to be that much more careful with your story’s dynamics.
I wish you the best of luck and look forward to seeing where you take this.
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October 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is quite an interesting story. Will Kagome ever go back to her time? Will the well even work now that the jewel is gone? What about visiting Kaede? What will the baby's name be? Did anyone else besides Seshhy and Rin survive? Will they see Seshhy and Rin again? So many unanswered questions. In my opinion, you as the writer should decide on the name of the baby yourself as he is your creation, your character. Of course, it's yor story and you can do what you want. Don't forget that it should be a Japanese name as are all the names of all the characters. It is a Japanese anime after all. You can try using an online Japanese dictionary for ideas or a real one if you have one. One spelling error I noticed and felt to point out is you spelled amber as ember unless you actually meant ember, which is, as my dictionary words it, a red-hot piece of fuel. Amber is the color of hanyou Inuyasha's eyes. Also, a little more detail couldn't hurt, but you don't have to listen to me, it's still a great story and very creative.
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October 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
heyy there me again! :) yay Kagome now has a son.. u should call him either.. Tenshi(it means angel in japanese) or..Takara (it means treasure) or..Koinu(Puppy! hehe that way this name also carries part of Inuyasha's name) that way the tradition doesnt stop.. *Inutiasho(inuyasha's dad) Inuyasha =now ... Koinu lol anyways awesommeee chapter! I really hope ya update soon can't wait to see whats gonna happen next.. I really think that Kagome should gain sum demon attributes or turn demon.. cuz maybe birthing a demon while being a miko she needs to be able to do certain things for her child that only a demon could? anyways keep up the gr8 work lol :) hope u liked my suggestions
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October 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awesome! i can't wait to see whats gonna happen next.. whats Inuyasha gonna think when he comes back to his hanyou form. now hes stuck with Kagome for life after he raped her.. hes gonna be devastated and full of self loathing.. poor Inu .. Poor Kagome.. shes prolly gonna end up pregnant too.. and maybe end up half demon or full demon cuz she technically mated with the Full demon Inu..? anyways keep up the awesome work and plz update soon!
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October 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
nice and disgusting at the same time cause i hate rape stories but if she accepts this then im ok with it please another chapter!