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for Infinite Dreams

by ChibiPorunga

person Chibi-Porunga
schedule October 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good things come to those who wait ^.^
person person
schedule October 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Sweet as. That's just awesome. Yay for bondage. >:D Yoko dekimashita. I look forward to the next chapter.
person Tsu-chan
schedule October 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A surplus of adjectives does not necessarily make a good story. Also, I'm not entirely sure you know what the words you used mean. A story flows better when the author uses mostly words they know the exact meaning of, and some words found in a thesaurus. If you're not sure what a word means, don't be afraid to look it up! Brain farts happen to the best of us. ^_^

I think you're off to a great start! I only want to help you with a little constructive criticism.
person Chibi-Porunga
schedule October 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for expressing constructive criticism ^.^ I do have a broad vocabulary and I admit, at times I falter with the meanings (especially if I'm at a loss or rushing along); I tend to try and not use the same words over and over or consecutively. But, be sure...in future chapters to come I will be more careful! Thanks again! ^.^
person loke
schedule October 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
More....tell us more....wow.

That was a great chapter. Sesshoumaru is so...*sigh*....what happens next?
person foxykittykat
schedule October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
beautiful. continue
person foxykittykat
schedule October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
you have to continue this! please? *puppy dog eyes*
schedule October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was a good chapter....very interesting....can't wait to read more.