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for A Short Cut

by Silent Pluto

person Ms Anonymous
schedule December 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
If you had cut the entire 6 chapters out and left only the lemon, it would have been good. If I had wanted to read some crazy OC story I would have gone to fanfiction.net. Honestly I skimmed the first few chapters and basically knew the plot by just a few paragraphs.

Also, girls don't squirt cum. I know the little Manga-hentai stories sometimes portray a woman's orgasm as some wonderful gusing thing, like a fountain of white goo, but in reality; no. Just..no.
person yvonne
schedule September 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ahhh.. poor miroku...i feel bad...he said i love you and then when sango found out about his plan they go back to fighting........

i loved they ending though never saw it coming!!!
person Trampled_Rose
schedule August 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I loved it, especially the ending, it was like an episode..a lemony one lol.
person bjonsie13
schedule June 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i liked how u kept the characters in character throughout the entire story. and i absolutely love the ending! it was hilarious! thanks for the great story. this is the best miroku/sango i've read yet.
person Deep Serenity
schedule April 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This was pretty good!, I love all the scenes with the other fox demons it was creative and well thought out. It was very good indeed. Keep up the good work.
person Kourui
schedule February 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hmm...Miroku is a bit OOC He would never actualy harm someone like that threaten them maybe but not harm, I'm just saying awsome job though keep it up!!!


Koirui
person Kourui
schedule February 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
LOL sangos mad now, ^_^ Yeah awsom job, Oh my god poor Sango I wonder if Miroku new or if it was only the foxs...hmmm? Anyway awsome job I loved it!!!


Kourui
person Kourui
schedule February 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
LOL That was a funny chapter, LOL I loved the end were Miroku kept singing over and over I'm not dreamng ^_^ Awsome job!!!


Kourui
person Kourui
schedule February 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow great chapter the lemon was a litte dry lol but still good, awsome job ^_^ LOL Miroku was trying so hard to ^_~


Kourui
person Kopurui
schedule February 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
LOL I loved it, woot! The ending was awsome great job, keep up the good work awsomw job!!!


Kourui