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June 20, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I got kinda scared there for a moment. I really thought for a minute that she and Sesshomaru weren't going to find each other because of the so many obstacles in the way. As far as her dreams she keep having I take it they were premonitions/ wrongs that she should have paid close attention to hell Sesshomaru as well for that matter. I really enjoyed reading this story and you should keep up the good work. I have a niche for writing some great fan-fictions.
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February 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I first read this story years ago but never finished it. I loved it then and even after all this time I still do. Great story I love your writing style. I cannot wait to read more from you.
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March 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I am so glad that I paid some attention to my email when someone asked about your story. I had the pleasure of reading your story! The one thing I regret is not being able to read it when it was going through its creation stages by you. You know, chapt. by chapt. I really love the OOc of Sesshomaru because if I had to write him in a story, it would be mostly OOc. I love the way you made Kagome a woman of strength. Making Souta the elder Bro was wonderful. I adore the way you made every angst situation full of emotion that at some point it had me in tears Especially Sango's demise. I love it when authors make me cry. Understand, I'm not at all gloomy, I just like to feel or get into your characters. The way you told this story, in my opinion captured the beautiful everyday life of this reservation that will always be remembered by me because you made me feel like I was there. Truly I enjoyed this story and I'm looking forward to reading more of you works. Peace!
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April 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey ;)
I love your work, we've exchanged email before, you and I. I think you're a very talented writer, and this is coming from a woman who writes professionally. Not fiction, not fun, but all the same, in one of those professions that people get impressed about, but really means nothing; value comes from doing something well and helping others. Most of the suits (and I include myself in this category) don't do very much for others. I have always tried to be different, but I still believe that the person who cuts my hair does more for society than I have, for she makes people feel good about themselves every day, something that I can only watch in awe and with gratitude.
And so, I'm very selective in what I'll read - I've always love anime, and I don't really care if it's "appropriate" in the eyes of those who think fun should stop at 18 or 21 or surely before one becomes a.
I love DLL's work, especially her shorter stories - ShadowsWeaver, Sesshou_lover, Sidhe, there are some wonderful writers, and some very good ones. You write very well, very cleanly, good syntax and flow, excellent dialogue, creative and original ideas, it's all very good. This story is very different but I've been enjoying it and wondering where you would take us.
I know you said "Rape and Death" -- okay, fair enough.
Here is my one small problem, and this is for discussion, it is most definitely not in the nature of "You did bad" or anything of that sort. I have a preference, and I believe this is the case for most people, to know if a *major character* is going to die. This isn't set up at the start as a dark fiction; more of an adventure/drama/discovery and very much AU, and you said some OOC. That's fine. But major character death without warning is a bit upsetting.
I fully understand and accept that you did warn; but you warned of death and rape, not of major character death -- that's one of those issues that is a hot button issue "Is it necessary to warn of character death, and if so, of all or just major characters. Many readers prefer to avoid major character death stories; they find it disturbing. DLL's recent story, Creed of the Other Breed, contains character death, major character death, but it's warned ahead of time so you know that the death will be of a major, but not primary character.
I personally don't enjoy stories where Kagome or Inuyasha or Sesshoumaru die. I won't generally read such stories unless it's the sort of "death" where they have been together for a very, very long time, and decide that it is time to move on to the next "dimension" -- however you are to phrase it -- together, as one, mated, as one soul (yes, I have a sappy romantic side) -- even so, I prefer to have it end with them in bed, lol, having fun and living, arguing, laughing, and loving -- with misunderstandings and temper and power and all of the different ideas and original plots I've seen.
Recently someone by the name of Trinity3000 wrote a story called .. (I think I have the title right) The End of (the) Demons.. or The End of Demons -- it was nominated this quarter to Dokuga by Kagome357 (the writer of the very original "Kinky Boots").. Trinity writes exceedingly well,and her story is considered a dark fan fiction, but it's a wonderful portrayal of Sesshoumaru and I don't believe there is going to be any character death in that one, merely a very inventive story with a good deal of violence.
She's a new writer, not on A Single Spark yet, although we have been trying to get her to put the story there, it would be very popular... I guess the difference is that, that story says it's dark, Demonlordlover (DLL is easier to type) has her story, Creed, marked as a dark fiction, with character death, and we all treaded carefully... your story didn't say "dark fic" at least I didn't see it, and while you said graphic rape and murder (and that rape was -- as you warned -- exactly as you said, very graphic and horrofic... when one sees fisting in a rape scene with anal rape, that combination is extremely violent and graphic, especially with the beatings and the rest of the horror.
Sango in this story to that point was a main character. I didn't expect it to be her -- I guess what I'm saying, is that in my opinion - and this is only one person's view - if it was going to be Sango (it couldn't very well be Kagome, or there would be no story) then a "Main character death" warning might have been in place. I realize that this would have given it away, but it would have also given the reader a choice beyond the "explicit read at your own risk". I can read explicit, most of us can and do and some kinds of explicit -- the adult variety -- are lots of fun if written well.
I see the dilemma you would have had. Indicate main character or character death and you give it away - but if not, you risk upsetting readers who don't want to read about a favorite character being raped, sodomized, ripped by fisting and then shot in the head. I thought when you warned of graphic rape and death that a hitch-hiker would be picked up, or some other girl, and Kagome and Sango would escape. I didn't think for a moment that by rape and death you meant Major character death.
I'm so sorry to have to talk about this, and I do NOT with to give the impression that I don't like the story - other than that, I do like it, I can't not like something as well written and creative, original and different... your stories are always good, and you always, always, excel.
I just wish, I would have preferred, if the warning had been more explicit as is the general trend - where there is character death, to be warned, especially when not in a dark fic where there is a warning at the start, and most especially when there is a warning but it doesn't do what it perhaps might have done.
Forgive this this less than stellar review -- if I were reviewing for the actual story, the writing, the originality, I would have nothing but positive things to say, and I do. But I felt this was an issue and so I raised it.
I apologize if this has upset you... nothing negative is intended at all, just my opinion and feelings in this regard.
I love your work, we've exchanged email before, you and I. I think you're a very talented writer, and this is coming from a woman who writes professionally. Not fiction, not fun, but all the same, in one of those professions that people get impressed about, but really means nothing; value comes from doing something well and helping others. Most of the suits (and I include myself in this category) don't do very much for others. I have always tried to be different, but I still believe that the person who cuts my hair does more for society than I have, for she makes people feel good about themselves every day, something that I can only watch in awe and with gratitude.
And so, I'm very selective in what I'll read - I've always love anime, and I don't really care if it's "appropriate" in the eyes of those who think fun should stop at 18 or 21 or surely before one becomes a
I love DLL's work, especially her shorter stories - ShadowsWeaver, Sesshou_lover, Sidhe, there are some wonderful writers, and some very good ones. You write very well, very cleanly, good syntax and flow, excellent dialogue, creative and original ideas, it's all very good. This story is very different but I've been enjoying it and wondering where you would take us.
I know you said "Rape and Death" -- okay, fair enough.
Here is my one small problem, and this is for discussion, it is most definitely not in the nature of "You did bad" or anything of that sort. I have a preference, and I believe this is the case for most people, to know if a *major character* is going to die. This isn't set up at the start as a dark fiction; more of an adventure/drama/discovery and very much AU, and you said some OOC. That's fine. But major character death without warning is a bit upsetting.
I fully understand and accept that you did warn; but you warned of death and rape, not of major character death -- that's one of those issues that is a hot button issue "Is it necessary to warn of character death, and if so, of all or just major characters. Many readers prefer to avoid major character death stories; they find it disturbing. DLL's recent story, Creed of the Other Breed, contains character death, major character death, but it's warned ahead of time so you know that the death will be of a major, but not primary character.
I personally don't enjoy stories where Kagome or Inuyasha or Sesshoumaru die. I won't generally read such stories unless it's the sort of "death" where they have been together for a very, very long time, and decide that it is time to move on to the next "dimension" -- however you are to phrase it -- together, as one, mated, as one soul (yes, I have a sappy romantic side) -- even so, I prefer to have it end with them in bed, lol, having fun and living, arguing, laughing, and loving -- with misunderstandings and temper and power and all of the different ideas and original plots I've seen.
Recently someone by the name of Trinity3000 wrote a story called .. (I think I have the title right) The End of (the) Demons.. or The End of Demons -- it was nominated this quarter to Dokuga by Kagome357 (the writer of the very original "Kinky Boots").. Trinity writes exceedingly well,and her story is considered a dark fan fiction, but it's a wonderful portrayal of Sesshoumaru and I don't believe there is going to be any character death in that one, merely a very inventive story with a good deal of violence.
She's a new writer, not on A Single Spark yet, although we have been trying to get her to put the story there, it would be very popular... I guess the difference is that, that story says it's dark, Demonlordlover (DLL is easier to type) has her story, Creed, marked as a dark fiction, with character death, and we all treaded carefully... your story didn't say "dark fic" at least I didn't see it, and while you said graphic rape and murder (and that rape was -- as you warned -- exactly as you said, very graphic and horrofic... when one sees fisting in a rape scene with anal rape, that combination is extremely violent and graphic, especially with the beatings and the rest of the horror.
Sango in this story to that point was a main character. I didn't expect it to be her -- I guess what I'm saying, is that in my opinion - and this is only one person's view - if it was going to be Sango (it couldn't very well be Kagome, or there would be no story) then a "Main character death" warning might have been in place. I realize that this would have given it away, but it would have also given the reader a choice beyond the "explicit read at your own risk". I can read explicit, most of us can and do and some kinds of explicit -- the adult variety -- are lots of fun if written well.
I see the dilemma you would have had. Indicate main character or character death and you give it away - but if not, you risk upsetting readers who don't want to read about a favorite character being raped, sodomized, ripped by fisting and then shot in the head. I thought when you warned of graphic rape and death that a hitch-hiker would be picked up, or some other girl, and Kagome and Sango would escape. I didn't think for a moment that by rape and death you meant Major character death.
I'm so sorry to have to talk about this, and I do NOT with to give the impression that I don't like the story - other than that, I do like it, I can't not like something as well written and creative, original and different... your stories are always good, and you always, always, excel.
I just wish, I would have preferred, if the warning had been more explicit as is the general trend - where there is character death, to be warned, especially when not in a dark fic where there is a warning at the start, and most especially when there is a warning but it doesn't do what it perhaps might have done.
Forgive this this less than stellar review -- if I were reviewing for the actual story, the writing, the originality, I would have nothing but positive things to say, and I do. But I felt this was an issue and so I raised it.
I apologize if this has upset you... nothing negative is intended at all, just my opinion and feelings in this regard.
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April 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I see your point about the warning... perhaps I should have stated 'Major character death' in the warning. I appreciate your honesty, and the fact that you were not ugly about it. I know that this is not my best work, but it still hurts a little when people trash it.
'JOURNEY' was actually a story that I had written many (17) years ago with original characters, in hopes of submitting it to a publisher one day. After I started writing fanfiction and my skill at writing grew, I decided to see if I could change it into a Sess/Kag fic wtihout changing too much of the content. I suceeded
in making the change, but I was never really thrilled with the way it flowed... I always thought that there was more that I could have done with it.
In light of your observation... I will go back and add a warning...both in the summary, and at the beginning of the chapter.
'JOURNEY' was actually a story that I had written many (17) years ago with original characters, in hopes of submitting it to a publisher one day. After I started writing fanfiction and my skill at writing grew, I decided to see if I could change it into a Sess/Kag fic wtihout changing too much of the content. I suceeded
in making the change, but I was never really thrilled with the way it flowed... I always thought that there was more that I could have done with it.
In light of your observation... I will go back and add a warning...both in the summary, and at the beginning of the chapter.
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January 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hey i just wanted to let you know that i think this is a great story. i found it yesterday and i just finished reading today, i could stop, it was so freaking addicted that i had to finsh it. any who good job and i going to enjoy reading more of your stories.
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September 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This was a really well done story. It had unique situations and an original story line.! I loved it. The ending was really sappy and girly, and I LOVED IT. It was so Kawaii!! You definately know that it was the end. Everything wrapped up nicely with a bow... :) Please make some more...XD... *throws flowers at your feet*.. We're not worthy... We're not worthy.. *The Empress bows down grovelling*... Hope to read more of you soon.. Ja Ne!
The Empress
The Empress
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July 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Touching story. I liked the slow building of hte relationships, but the pacing seemed to lag in the beginning and again once she set up on the ranch. I thought it was well thought out and Kagome was a particularly strong character, which is how I envision her from the manga, but Sesshoumaru was pretty OC at times with his willingness to be in touch with his feelings. Thank you for redeeming Kikyo, but I don't think she needed to be so trashed up. I'm not a Kikyo hater, nor lover, but she has a character in the manga that can be respected. I understand you needed someone in that role, but it seemed a bit heavy handed. Points for working modern res life into a fan fic!
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March 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh my goodness! That was stupendous! It was suspensefull, captivating, erotic, exciting, adventerous, heartbreaking, moving, sickning, sorrowfull, and I can't think of anymore adjectives at the moment. Damn, there are more though. I need to play mad libs more.
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February 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Beautiful!!!!! Abousloty Beautiful!!!! I loved it :D :D :D :D :D