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If SMACK! you SMACK! ever SMACK! write SMACK! bad SMACK! smut SMACK! again, SMACK! I'll SMACK!...I don't now, snort rootbeer up my nose everytime you post, as per usual.

In conclusion: good idea, baaaaaaaad execution. Alright, everyone has their own god-given level of talent and X number of years experience under their belt, but you know and I know that you weren't even *trying* to write well, for whatever reason. Several people have been kind enough to point out glaring errors in your fic, so why don't you avoid the wank-fest and just...fix them?

And OOC? I think you mean "rabid Sess-bashing". Quick question: why does a few whacks on the ass hurt less in your world than getting your arm cut off at the shoulder?

Wonderful! I always thought Sesshoumaru deserved a good spanking! Thanks for giving him one. Hilarious!

Wow. Now you've pissed on the backstory of Inuyasha. Congrats or something. Really, you should stop trying to "shock" everyone with these pathetic attempts at dark!fic. In fact the only feelings you've evoked is pity that the characters have been subjected to your writing.

1.) Sesshoumaru isn't the whiny spoiled brat you've written.
2.) Izayoi isn't a callous bitch that cackles with glee when her stepson is being abused.
3.) Inutaishou would not have beat his child. And that's what you wrote. Child abuse, not punishment.
4.) No servant who wanted to keep his hide would have spoke out against the Lord's first wife and mother of his heir! It just wasn't done.
5.) Spell check is your friend.
6.) As is the dictionary.
7.) Proofreading is fun!
8.) If Sesshoumaru wanted Inuyasha dead, he'd be dead.
9.) So, Sesshoumaru's mother was self-centered, but Inutaishou and Izayoi are selfish, self-absorbed child beaters. Gee. Remind me who the "bad" parent is?
10.) Thanks for once again, lowering the general quality of AFF.N. You must be so proud.

I think you need to try a different plot. This one was played out after Inu spanked Kag. Also, Sess would have been Izayoi's step-son NOT her son-in-law. Good luck with a different plot.

Hi! I was the person asking for this spanking in "A Paddle for Shippou"! To be honest, I love the idea but the execution is kind of lacking, like you didn't really want to write it. I don't see why you said Sess has to be OOC for his father to spank him, but Spud is right that it'd take much more to break his spirit, so unpleasant that Izayoi couldn't watch. He'd have to be held down, and he'd still give his father some good scratches and bites. The spanking action, which is why everyone read this, is non-erotic and way too vague. I couldn't picture it in my head.

I hope this doesn't come across the wrong way since you've been under a lot of criticism lately, but this story needs some...tinkering? Get inside Sesshoumaru's head more and develop his emotions. How does this event affect his view of himself and his relationship with his father? Does Inutaishou expect this to solve anything? Does he blame himself, and why didn't he discipline him earlier? Since Sess is really "a small child", doesn't Izayoi feel a little bit obligated to replace his mother? This could be a rather interesting story if you'd put some more thought into it.

Inutaishou plays favorites. He just brushes off the pain he caused Sesshoumaru by marrying Izayoi. No good father would stop loving his son, especially since he's responsible for how him. Yasha held Shippou and told him he still loved him, and Inutaishou should do the same. Instead of threatening to disherit him, he'd just grab him and throw him over his knee and promise more pain if he's disobeyed again. And then he says his entire life revolves around Izayoi and Yasha: does Sess not count or something? I get the feeling you don't like Sesshoumaru, but you're making me feel sorry for him!

Sess could've killed Yasha after his father died when he's human, but something, most likely honor, stopped him. Anyway, Inutaishou raised Sess from birth so he would know what he's capable of and wouldn't give him the oppurtunity. And...uh, why is Sess acting like he's 5 instead of 15? He's a callous, arrogent, ruthless bastard in canon, but he's still a tough-as-nails badass. Sess would have fought in battles at a very early age and had combat training all his life, so he'd easily shrug off anything short of torture. Remember, how medival parents disciplined their children would be considered child abuse today. Sess would have been beaten half to death (with a whip) and locked in a dungeon.

i LOVED it, you must continue.

now that was a good story but it made me cry.I mean when you spank someone's Favorite(In my case second favorite)you got to cry at least once. Ppl who say that he should have not cried need to take the experence and get spanked themselves cuz fyi ppl it hurts and when it gets done over and over again you will cry.so when yall say he should not of showed the emotion think back to your experence with your very own paddle.
(This is my point of view and probably the author's)
K_L_C

I think it's good. but admit it you're really a paddle fetishist!

Hehehe. Sesshy finally got punished! Hey wait, wasn't I supposed to beta read it?

Ouch. That one had to hurt...heh.
I live for these...lol.