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December 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
really good stories...hum i hope the next chapters up soon ....so please hurry
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November 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This fic is great! I love it! Though I do have a question, (This probably sounds bad... Sorry if it does. ^.^) do you need a beta reader? I could check all the spelling and stuff... I really do need something better to do, so I figure I might as well offer. o.0 Well, email me with your answer! Great job with the story! Update soon!
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November 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting..very interesting indeed, keep it up, and you DID spelled Inu Youkai right, hee hee. ^_^
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October 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The last two chapters aren't quite as.. They don't have as much action in them- nothing has really happened. Rin woke up, ate and went to the garden; there wasn't any real conversation in the background- no gossip between cousins- or anything. Try to have a plot point (i guess thats what to call it) in each chapter, a step in a ladder before the climax of the story. ("She kneeled down on her knees and sniffed the roses nice sweet scent." Should be: She knelt down and sniffed the roses nice, sweet scent.)
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October 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I'm really liking your story. 'Ornament' is the proper spelling, and you got 'biological' correct. I'm still a little confused about what's going on, but it keeps me coming back for more.
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September 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I'm confused...but I'm also interested. I will just have to go back and read it again!
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September 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter.....I'm glad you glad the way it was formatted before.....It looks a whole lot better......keep the good work up!!!!!!!!
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September 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
NO, NO, NO, NO, NO! That is not how it is suppose to work! You are suppose to keep writing and not leave us squirming in our seats- understand? Great chapter, I'm really likeng this story please update soon. (I didn't catch any errors)
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September 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like your story so far.....can't wait to read more....
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September 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This last chapter was better in length than the others, you write well. The only thing that I'm finding distracting is you keep popping up with people's POVs, like you have a list in front of you of each character that you want to speak, each person has had a POV now and I think it would be easier just to stick with either 1st or 3rd person rather than jumping back and forth. (Just a hint for your next story) But the story itself is great, I hope you continue and I will be looking for your next posting.