rate_review Reviews

This story is amazing. Great plot and angst. I was wondering how you were going to hate on Kagome (nice choice). And I liked the "subtleness" of chapter three ;) But your cliffhangers are painful. Geez, pins and needles much.The edge of my seat is not a fun place to stay. I know you are looking for critical feedback, but I give 'props' or praise where it is due. And there is much for you. Please update soon, I hate waiting months for epics like this.

wow, another amazing chapter!! i love it!! inu'll fight with them wont he? ;) yey for a new enemy! and a new chapter! ;)

Hmm...I'll go straight to the point. I understand from the first chapter that you have a beta reader. However, after reading the fourth chapter, I'm afraid I'll have to suggest that you either get a second beta, or find a new beta altogether. The sentence strutures are all wonky, and there are a couple of spelling and grammar mistakes here and there.

Just look at the very first part of the first paragraph: His speed continued rising as he kept his pace
The sentence will flow more smoothly if you changed the phrase 'continued rising' to 'continued to rise'.
And how on earth can your speed increase if you 'kept your pace'?

On a lighter note, I love your plot so far. There are nice long chapters, the promise of a threesome among my favorite demons, and not much OOCness to deal with. Plus, you update pretty frequently. -yay- =)
So, keep up the good work, and if possible, find a beta...

Cheers,
chibi
P.S. Hope you're not offended by the rant...I really do love your fic...
P.P.S Not sure if you've mentioned this or not, but is there going to be MPreg? Please please please say yes!!! XD

Honestly, I totally loved the last part of the conversation where Inuyasha was included, it was awesome. I love it how Inuyasha reacted towards Kouga and put Sesshoumaru down. It was so mature and brilliant. I specially liked the fact that Inuyasha displayed backbone. In most of the fiction, it's either too much which makes him cocky or too little, which is depressing, as it makes him submissive. I think you got his character perfectly! Overall, I also liked the whole chapter. So, please, update soon. Merry Christmas and Happy New Year!

this is a very good story. i've been reading fanfiction for five years or so in many different fandoms and this is promising to be a good one. Please complete!!

Intriguing story. I like the newest twist, with all the demons so shocked at Kagome's prejudiced-human outlook. As you stated in the beginning, there'd be an obstacle getting all the (former) enemies together, but your storyline is compelling and it is working well. I can feel the old hatreds dying away, and the growing new bonds between the clans developing in a natural way. This is good storytelling, good writing. Even though this story hasn't had much lemon/lime in it, I am enjoying this story and want to read more.

wow. i'm absolutely loving your story. not only are you giving us the greatness that is sessinukou but some wonderful angst and drama. i'm so looking foward to your next update. keep up the great work ^__^

wow, just, wow, your fic is amazing, it's like i'm reading a novel, and not just a fanfic. please continue writing!!

This is a really great story and I am enjoying it mightily. I hope that you have both Miraku and Sango be accepting of demon behaviours and love. I would also like to vote for the two of them to be together and I hope that you have Inu/Kogua/Sess raise Shippo with Rin. They both need strong and caring protectors.


Thanks
Calia

You have an amazing plot line, wonderful writing skills and extraordinary imagination. I think the thing that makes you an outstanding writer is that the characters in your fiction are portrayed according to the characters in the anime or manga and still flow with the story. It takes great deal of understanding of the characters, imagination and writing skills to pull that of. I have only read one other fiction whose writer was able to pull that of among all the other fictions I have read. So, congratulations. I am dieing to read the next chapters. However, seeing the length and quality of the chapters it would be unfair to say update soon. (I honestly don't know how you can write such long chapters but I am glad that you can!) Anyway, good luck and update as often as you can! Bye!
PS. Sorry you lost all the reviews. Mine was pretty long. :(