rate_review Reviews

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

PLEASE CONTINUE!
this is very sad.. *tear*

hey just trying to help u its p.o.v not prove p.o.v stands for point of veiw and its not full fleshed demon its full fledged demon
other than that its great!!!
peace

This is a cute and sad story. Please continue. Inuyasha and Kagome forever.

don't take this as a flame but there is definite room for improvement in your story. first off, it's Kagome's POV not Kagome's Prove. and if you're writing in first person, you need more detail than your providing. you have some good sentences in there but a chapter is def. supposed to be longer than a paragraph. so if it was a prologue or something say so and also fix your spacing, it's hard to read as one paragraph. you should probably getting a beta who'd be a good source for giving you ideas on how to add more detail and setting to your fanfic. again this is not a flame, i just think the story could be good if you rework it.