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August 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The plot is a good one, although your style could use some work. You may want to write more and bring more detail and into the story besides their povs. By actually making it more into story than a diary you would attract more readers and get more and better reviews. But that's just my opinion, I am only one. Oh! And this is NOT a FLAME. I just think you have it in you to improve and would love to see it happen. ._~
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August 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Anon I'm ok with criticism,but you are acting like an ass! I said I was sorry for the dam cliffy OK!I'm sorry that I needed sleep,but I have a dam life unlike *most people*.Plus I was tired[my health,and needs come first].It will be saturday when I can continue with the story.All I can tell you is it has Rin teasing SesshoumaruXD to the brink of insanity,or losing control and claiming her;D.
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August 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE it and u'd better make it more than 5 chapters! oh but, 'dam it' is really spelled 'damn it' or 'damnit'
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August 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Stop it with the fucking cliff hangers your stories are shitty because of them.
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August 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
man you have got to stop with the cliff hangers
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August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I will try to update soon.I have to apologize again ,because it might be Saturday before I update.The reason is I need time for school[I have to be rested,etc.]
I will also be able to write more,and keep awake longer on Saturday.Thanks again.
I will also be able to write more,and keep awake longer on Saturday.Thanks again.
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August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i like it! u should definatly keep going- just make it longer kay?
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August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OH YES!!!! PLEASE CONTINUE!!!!!!!! I want to see what Rin has up her sleeve........
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August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
was little confused at first about the age thing but read your correction.
Is this going to be a full story or just a 2-shot maybe?
Hopr the 2nd chapter has some talking,thou you wrote "thinking and feelings" well.
Is this going to be a full story or just a 2-shot maybe?
Hopr the 2nd chapter has some talking,thou you wrote "thinking and feelings" well.
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August 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a cool story cant wait for the next update.