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What a naughty, naughty fox...but damn! Nice action in there. I have been waiting for an update to this. I am glad to see you have Shippou in it...he really is a huge piece of Kagome's heart. I hope you update soon.

I do so like it when Youko is naughty. Pity Hiei didn't check out the shrine a bit more thoroughly, I'm sure he would have been surprised to find the girl of his dreams. Glad that you are updating again, can't wait for the next chapter.

i think you have a great start as a writer. i feel like there were some words missing and that it moved a little fast for the first chapter. i personally don't like crossovers, but as for the characters i think you got their personas pretty well. but i think hiei was a little more visably aggressive than need be, i don't think he'd be slicing up trees over an erotic dream. also, you mentioned her being penetrated by two guys when there were three... what was the third guy doing?

also, yoko kurama and suichi are one and the same in that there is only one soul and one persona. the dialogue between them is akward to me that way and makes it seem reminicent of yami/yugi from yugioh and dark/daisuke from d.n.angel where there were two souls occupying the same body.

the difference between those two examples and kurama is that kurama was a fox demon that possesed an unborn child, that child's soul is gone now. when kurama shifts from his human "shuichi" body into his demon "yoko" body it's just as him "traveling back in time," so to speak (remember their first tournament where kurama's opponent did that mist thing that should have turned him into a baby? it went back too far and turned him back into yoko kurama), or drawing out his full power (like when the other guy gave him that elixer thing kurama drank to become yoko kurama in the fight with kuronoue (i think i spelled that wrong >.>; )).

at any rate, i think you have alot of potential as a writer and that you have a great start. keep it up :)

ack, i forgot to comment on the lemon/lime-ness and other such details ^^; the descriptions are good and the lemon/lime was convincing. damn kagome's luck! *shakes fist* >_O

wow....just wow....this left me feelin hot...and damn if that an't one hell of a dream. i like tha stori :) it's cool. i respect inu for what he did. that was smart. but i wanna know more! lol and i like how you have Yusuke down to a T. he's really havin it rough :) well i look forward to you stori and please UPDATE SOON!!1

JA NE ^_^

Looking good, glad to see that Kagome made it home ok. Even better that she has Kirara with her. This should teach Souta to watch what he says lol Can't wait for Kagome to meet the guys. As always I look forward to the next chapter. Update soon please

Very good, your writting just keeps on getting better and better.

Wonderful chapter, very well done on the scene goodbye. That would be an extremely difficult decision but she was right. As long as she stayed in the past it would be impossible to move on. I look forward to reading the next chapter. Please update soon.

LOVE IT!!!!!! Please up date soon!!!!!(please please please) Are no longer writing on Nameless anymore? (i hope not b/c i like that one too) XD
UP DATE SOON!!!!!

Another excellent, if sad chapter. I like that you sent Kirara back with Kagome. I haven't seen that done much. I also can't wait for the next update. I am really excited to see what happens when Kagome meets the detectives. Will she be meeting them seperately? Or as a group?