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August 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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August 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The plot seems good but ur grammar is HORRIBLE. Please do try and fix it.
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August 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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August 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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August 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
you really need to work on your grammer i had a hard time understanding the story. but from wut i could u it was good
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August 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Honestly, your grammar needs work, other than that you have a cool story. If you need grammar help you could ask someone to be a beta reader. You write the chapters and your beta reader corrects all the mistakes. A beta reader can also give advice on your story, not that you need it, or even if they did give you advice you would not have to actually use it, it is your story after all. But it is just a suggestion. Do what you like.
Kira
Kira
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August 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
looks great so far, keep going ^_^