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June 20, 2019 at 12:00 AM
Please, please, PLEEEEAASSEEE continue & finish this story; it’s AWESOME!!!
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October 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like how you have Rin's mind set is going.....How she really doesn't understand all what is going on......I hope she will at least tell Keade(sp?) what is going on with her and the dreams she is having ....She must trust someone......update soon.....
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August 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
a lot of kagura/kanna elements here. I'm not so sure whether its intentional or not but as it's a gray area, you should either point out more strongly the differences or purposeful similarities. The Rin/Sess angle was well done.
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August 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I am really getting into this. So the Shikon no Tama is in Rin's chest? Very interesting, thanks:)
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August 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very very nice! I'll be waiting for the next update. ;)
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August 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i loved it but didn't midoriko's soul get sucked into the shikon no tama making
it imposible for her to get reincarneted
it imposible for her to get reincarneted
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August 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i like this alot! one thing though- when rin masturbates, it was a bit jarring going from reality to imagination. I would make maybe the daydream italized. The ~~ things are just distracting and ruin the flow. lAlso, the story starting off with sess crying? reeaallly off putting. Maybe say he felt like it but didn't. People need to be led into your version of sess and expecting the readers to immediately understand your version is just no realisitc. Beyond that, the story is shaping up well! update soon!
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July 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting ....interesting...let's see where you go with it......
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July 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
At last, an adult Rin I can believe in... not a cutsie bratling or a naive seductress, but a young woman who has her own mind and her own will! Excelent work!
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July 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice story very good so far... keep up the good work. Can't wait to read chapter 2.