rate_review Reviews

This is definitely a wonderful "practice" piece!! Since you -want- criticism, I will mention the only thing I could think of. The wording you used at Sesshou's end ( "...as he shot his hot cum into her.") just seemed a little base to me... as in 'too biological-impersonal/not emotional-spiritual enough.'. I'm not sure how else to explain it, and maybe I'm being too picky... bah. I'm very much enjoying your writing and hope your muse stays happily with you for a long time!

I happen to really think sess and rin would make a perfect couple and you did an unbelieveable job of makin them seem even better and if I may say you made me hard as well, thank you for that and your incredible work. email me back if you like please :) bye bye

I like, I like, but are you sure that was a practice lemon? You did good!!!!

I have already seen the lemon in One Life and it was fantastic. This lemon blew my socks off. i'm one of your devoted readers of One Life and I am pleased to say that both lemons were worth the wait. Please write more, you are very talented and refreshing. Thank You.

KICK ASS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This was the BEST LEMON EVER!!!!!!!!! ROCK ON!!!!!! Wow, I can't wait till you write your other one....I might be late in the story, but could you make Sesshomaru rough with Rin in their meeting before they get it on...that always seems to make the scene really hot....MUHAHAHAHA....This is a great lemon....Hurry up and get that Review...SWEET...Update Soon On One Life.....Best practice Lemon I've ever read....wow....will you write my lemon for my story....I'm currently writing Fire Between Worlds.....and you do such a good job with Sesshomaru and Rin...maybe you could help....Well anyways...UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!!!

Whoa!That was spectacular!*fans self*

Dear Sir or Madame,
I really love this chapter. I always love sexual tension like that. Keep this up and you might get an award.
-Olivia

That was really good, there was no practice about it, that was a lemon and one of the better ones that I've read. But hey who am I to stop you if you want to leave anymore 'practice' lemons. Great detail, can't wait until you write one in 'One Life', good luck with it.

Hey, this was plenty hot !! sure you haven't written one of these before !?!?? wink wink !!!! Very romantic, making love in the rain.

I expect One Life's continuation to be scorching.

I love Sesshoumaru and rin fics! I kinda wish you would write more though...