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June 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
luv the story great chapter
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June 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ah, how i have missed this story :P nice chapter!
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May 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You know ... I do like this fic. Keep it up, I want to know more ... put in more porn, I like that too *Smiles*
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February 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Do I seem like a stalker tonight? hehe. I think this is the 3rd or 4th review I left on your various stories, so ya, I s'pose I am. scared? muahahaha! I'm just messing.
I LOVE your writing! I love your smut, but I think I love your sci-fi even more. This reminds me a little of ?The Abyss? I think that was the underwater movie where the Navy Seal went psycho. I really like the telepathy and the way you are building the relationship gradually. It is not rushed, and your characters have depth. I was so engrossed with the story that all 6 chapters flew by before I realized. One mistake that I noticed that you made a couple of times which spell check wouldn't pick up is revealed. You spelled it reviled. I am not entirely sure what reviled means, but I am guessing it is taken from vile, so if that helps you to remember which version to use at all. But a beta will help with that too. Mostly I just tuned out the mistakes, because we are not professional authors, so there are bound to be mistakes, and with how good your story is, they are easy to overlook.
I understand how real life can get in the way of writing when you have two kids, having two myself, plus a new puppy (she's sooooo cute!) but, pet pet, I beg you, pet pet, update soon! pet pet pet!!! (did I pet your ego enough?)
Until the next update!
I LOVE your writing! I love your smut, but I think I love your sci-fi even more. This reminds me a little of ?The Abyss? I think that was the underwater movie where the Navy Seal went psycho. I really like the telepathy and the way you are building the relationship gradually. It is not rushed, and your characters have depth. I was so engrossed with the story that all 6 chapters flew by before I realized. One mistake that I noticed that you made a couple of times which spell check wouldn't pick up is revealed. You spelled it reviled. I am not entirely sure what reviled means, but I am guessing it is taken from vile, so if that helps you to remember which version to use at all. But a beta will help with that too. Mostly I just tuned out the mistakes, because we are not professional authors, so there are bound to be mistakes, and with how good your story is, they are easy to overlook.
I understand how real life can get in the way of writing when you have two kids, having two myself, plus a new puppy (she's sooooo cute!) but, pet pet, I beg you, pet pet, update soon! pet pet pet!!! (did I pet your ego enough?)
Until the next update!
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January 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
What an enjoyable story you have started here. I really liked Arrangement, but I think that I may like this one more. This story has a lot of deapth to it (no pun intended). It has a lot of backstory that is just waiting to be sprung on the unsuspecting reader, and the characters, especially the OC ones, seem to be well thought out and rounded.
As far as OC's go, Nichole is a HOOT. She has attitude to spare and meshes well as a female protector of Kagome - a job usually assigned to Sango. I like her a lot. Ty is interesting too, but I like Nichole better. Tom (what a fun name for a shark) cracks me up. The scene where he got Sess's hair and was amused by the way it tickled his tongue around his teeth had me in stitches. Shi is interesting too, but Tom's obsession with Silver hair is just too funny. It adds a sense of childlike wonder to an otherwise possibly terrifying creature.
Now, the more cannon characters are also rather well done. You have left their basic personalities alone, but brought them more up-to-date. Naraku is hidden and letting another do his dirty work for him, Sango is a woman doing a man's job (this time with Inuyasha), Inuyasha is going around fixing things, Sess is cool and aloof, and Kagome is powerful, but alone. Inuyasha's protectiveness is brotherly and doesn't seem contrived. The thought of him being scared of the sharks is funny to me. I can almost see him start to react to them the way he reacts to Kouga in the manga. Sharks are the wolves of the sea you know. :-)
I could go on for a while about Sesshoumaru as a marine biologist thing...but I wont. Just note that I like it...and I like this story. I don't like the Shikon Effect....but then neither does Kagome. I wish that AFF had a notification policy like mediaminer or FF so I could find out when you update.... But until then, thanks for writing for us all and I'll just keep checking to see if you have written more.
Caitriona
As far as OC's go, Nichole is a HOOT. She has attitude to spare and meshes well as a female protector of Kagome - a job usually assigned to Sango. I like her a lot. Ty is interesting too, but I like Nichole better. Tom (what a fun name for a shark) cracks me up. The scene where he got Sess's hair and was amused by the way it tickled his tongue around his teeth had me in stitches. Shi is interesting too, but Tom's obsession with Silver hair is just too funny. It adds a sense of childlike wonder to an otherwise possibly terrifying creature.
Now, the more cannon characters are also rather well done. You have left their basic personalities alone, but brought them more up-to-date. Naraku is hidden and letting another do his dirty work for him, Sango is a woman doing a man's job (this time with Inuyasha), Inuyasha is going around fixing things, Sess is cool and aloof, and Kagome is powerful, but alone. Inuyasha's protectiveness is brotherly and doesn't seem contrived. The thought of him being scared of the sharks is funny to me. I can almost see him start to react to them the way he reacts to Kouga in the manga. Sharks are the wolves of the sea you know. :-)
I could go on for a while about Sesshoumaru as a marine biologist thing...but I wont. Just note that I like it...and I like this story. I don't like the Shikon Effect....but then neither does Kagome. I wish that AFF had a notification policy like mediaminer or FF so I could find out when you update.... But until then, thanks for writing for us all and I'll just keep checking to see if you have written more.
Caitriona
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January 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I just love this story. It's so neat. I like that Kagome has some interesting talent. I hope that eventually Sesshoumaru and her can empath each other. That would just drive every one batty. I just loved when he stopped Inuyasha from disturbing Kagome in this last chapter. Can't wait for more. Later.
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January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
oh man loved the story just finished reading it after i finished your last chap of Tits and Ass lol aka known as the Arrangement loved it kinda sad it was over but now i have this story its veryu new and original i love Tom and Shi they are so cute man keep updating i wonder what Sess is gunna do with this new info, and did Kagome hear him? Her reaction kinda says she did but the fear maybe she didnt hmmmm.... update soon please ::moves behind Kagome as she gives the infamous puppy look::
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January 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please do not stop updating story. It is so original and futuristic from all the other Kag/Sess fictions.
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January 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Cool and strang But dose sess like kagome or not Up date soon.
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January 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
lovely story cant wait for the update.