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July 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
--' the name i use is the name of the character *eyes twitches* *have a sgin on me saying im a girl*
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July 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i love this story! i'm addicted please update soon!
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July 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ayame should be nutered!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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July 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
poor Sesshy! right now I'm imagining Inu making fun of Sess when he sees him and then defending him. Poor sess!
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July 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Getting giid so far, can't wait to read the next characters.
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July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's good, really good ^^!
You have a few spelling errors... erm, limp is supposed to be limb, and... I have no idea if you had anymore. My attention span snapped XD!
Anyways, who cares, I still love it :3, please update soon!
You have a few spelling errors... erm, limp is supposed to be limb, and... I have no idea if you had anymore. My attention span snapped XD!
Anyways, who cares, I still love it :3, please update soon!
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July 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This looks like the begining of an awsome and sure to be hilarious story. I hope you finish the next chapter soon. One thing though. I'm probubly one of the worst spellers on the planet so I can't really give you any tips about that besides using http://dictionary.reference.com. But, rereading your story once or twice could help with your gramatical and phrasing.
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July 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good so far can't wait to read the up coming characters.
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July 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yee.... awkward prose, OOC-ness. I'm gonna take a guess; you're 14? Give or take a year.
Sesshoumaru deserves much much more respect than you're giving him. He's not... himself. I appreciate the fact that your spelling is pretty good, and the grammar for each sentence individually isn't horrid, but the overall story just seems so trite. How many people start up with one of the hot Inuyasha boys tied to a bed? How is it that, miraculously, the lord of the Northern Land would want a man, and not just any, but a fellow lord in his bed? I'm not discounting the possibility that he's gay or whatever, but seriously, how (unless you play with the nasty MPREG demons) is that going to help his empire? You can't further a dynasty without heirs...
Still, the very most bothersome part was the loss of Sesshoumaru. I may be a bit biased because he's my favourite character, but everyone, unless they're writing satire or OOC, ought to do right by their characters.
Sesshoumaru deserves much much more respect than you're giving him. He's not... himself. I appreciate the fact that your spelling is pretty good, and the grammar for each sentence individually isn't horrid, but the overall story just seems so trite. How many people start up with one of the hot Inuyasha boys tied to a bed? How is it that, miraculously, the lord of the Northern Land would want a man, and not just any, but a fellow lord in his bed? I'm not discounting the possibility that he's gay or whatever, but seriously, how (unless you play with the nasty MPREG demons) is that going to help his empire? You can't further a dynasty without heirs...
Still, the very most bothersome part was the loss of Sesshoumaru. I may be a bit biased because he's my favourite character, but everyone, unless they're writing satire or OOC, ought to do right by their characters.
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July 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ohhh!! prepare for the wedding ceremony eh? nice.
great plot! but the grammar is a bit off sometimes... nothing a good beta couldnt fix ;)
update soon!
great plot! but the grammar is a bit off sometimes... nothing a good beta couldnt fix ;)
update soon!