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for Battle for my Heart

by Kougaschild

person kogasbabe
schedule September 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow, some people dont take criticism well.
person anon
schedule September 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
actually, this is the first story of yours that i've bothered to review. you have another 'fan' i suppose. and, by the way, there's a difference between making a lot of mistakes and being functionally illiterate.
person Anon
schedule September 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Miroku/Sango, Inuyasha/Ayame
person anon
schedule September 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
sorry, the story is choppy and disorganized at best. the spelling is horrible, and i'm not really seeing much of a point. PLEASE get a beta. and it wouldnt hurt if the chapters were more than a few sentences long.
schedule September 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Anon i have seen you i almost all the stories i have written and you have said stuff like that. Lisen dude I dont have to spell all the words correct and its my stur so BACK OFF. because alot of ppl make mistakes.
person emi
schedule July 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
make ur chapters longer plez... update or die! jk
person tash922
schedule July 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow i loved it its an intersing story but ummm.... i don't mean to critec ur work but ur narrating could use some work
try to dramaditsize discrbe to picture more clearly ... i hope that help i still think ur doing amazing well please updtae soon ^.^
person Everqueen
schedule July 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, Inuyasha is such a jerk. HEHE, awe, Kouga was so sweet to Shippou, me likey. YAY
person Everqueen
schedule July 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ah, you are going to have Kouga give up his shards before the fight? I always see him helping in that fight and then giving up the shards (I think he would without a fuss, except maybe to be the last to give it up.) So, shippou views Kouga as a father figure eh? That's cool. Kagome and Kouga as parent figures, I like where this is heading. Oh and you are doing an amazing job on Inuyasha's speech. Keep it up, can't wait to read more.
person Everqueen
schedule July 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I hope that's just the summary, if it is, then it should be good. Hope the real story comes up soon.