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July 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*Overheats... collapses... falls off chair* Good gravy!! That was beyond hot!! *shifty eyes* Dayum, I can barely think of anything to write. I keep seeing images of the dark hottie Naraku in my hentaified overheated mind. I think my eyes orgasmed at some point. *snicker* Great chapter, flowed beautifully!!
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July 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Damn! Im never ever dissapointed with you. pls update. I know its sick but after this chapter me, myself and a friend are going to have a little chat! YYYYYYYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You continue torture, I will faithfully read and review!
Your new slave I mean fan
hiro
Your new slave I mean fan
hiro
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July 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow oh wow! I loved the chapter so hard core..... I can't wait to see what happens next. Keep up the good work....
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July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Meanie!!! Ohhh, I hate cliffhangers! I love how the story is developping... Please update!!!!
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July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Haha! I loved this one. Damn, you have beaten me to what I am going to write in my story. though I am not going to have a threesome, it will have toys involved. *Rubs her hands in perverted delight* I love lemony smut. And you just write the best!
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July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOW!!! Simply OUTSTANDING!!! Please update soon. This story has me on the edge of my seat. PEACE!!!
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July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice chapter.
Sadly though I have more to say this time about your response to my previous review.
'The moon rises daily where I live...' First of all, there is no need to be so condescending. Your story is interesting and engaging but your unusual usage of the word detracts from the story. Something most authors consider a bad thing as the reader, stops reading to try to decipher what was written. I know you mentioned that you wanted no flames at the beginning of the story, you should have also noted that you weren't interested in creative criticism if you are only going to defend your reasons rather then taking the advice in the spirit that it was meant. Advice, to take or ignore, nothing more.
'Actually I said ‘moon risings’ once. Moon cycles... moon up to moon down.' To most everyone else in the world 'Moon cycles' usually refer to the lunar cycle. In fact many writers use the term moon to simply mean a month's time, or one lunar cycle. I didn't catch the 'moon risings' reference, in fact if you hadn't had a character to translate eight moons to eight days, I would still be confused about your timeline. And this isn't really something I want to be thinking about when I came to read a good smutfic.
Again, I am just trying to be helpful. Please feel free to continue the discussion in e-mail, or not. Looking forward to your next chapter. :)
Sadly though I have more to say this time about your response to my previous review.
'The moon rises daily where I live...' First of all, there is no need to be so condescending. Your story is interesting and engaging but your unusual usage of the word detracts from the story. Something most authors consider a bad thing as the reader, stops reading to try to decipher what was written. I know you mentioned that you wanted no flames at the beginning of the story, you should have also noted that you weren't interested in creative criticism if you are only going to defend your reasons rather then taking the advice in the spirit that it was meant. Advice, to take or ignore, nothing more.
'Actually I said ‘moon risings’ once. Moon cycles... moon up to moon down.' To most everyone else in the world 'Moon cycles' usually refer to the lunar cycle. In fact many writers use the term moon to simply mean a month's time, or one lunar cycle. I didn't catch the 'moon risings' reference, in fact if you hadn't had a character to translate eight moons to eight days, I would still be confused about your timeline. And this isn't really something I want to be thinking about when I came to read a good smutfic.
Again, I am just trying to be helpful. Please feel free to continue the discussion in e-mail, or not. Looking forward to your next chapter. :)
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July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very nice, and erotic. Please continue!
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July 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hello darling! Oh my, that was an evil cliff hanger if I ever saw one! lol. I am trying to think if you've ever had an eviler cliff hanger, but at this moment I cannot recall one. I could confirm the said evilness of the given cliffhanger by going back and reading through everything of yours that was ever written, but unfortunately I have to get up early tomorrow, and have a puppy who likes to get up even eariler and wake me up because she would like to go play outside, haha. So for the time being, and unless you can jog my memory with your thoughts on your evilest cliffhanger, I will count this one as containing the most evil to date, haha. Wow, that felt quite breathy! This story seems to be flowing along smashingly well. The way you got into Naraku's mind like that was just amazing. I can already feel Inuyasha's heart breaking from what he will eventually see and hear---even thought I love the Sesshoumaru and the Kagome together, I still feel for the younger brother. But hey, life's not always fair---enought philosiphising...And Sesshoumaru strapped to a table like a large Inu Buffet? (Insert hentai thoughts here--many many thoughts) Yea, I can think of some things to do to him while he's like that. Oh, did I just say that outloud? Why yes, I do believe so yes! Great job, you were fabulous as always, and I cannot wait for more. I'll have to add this to my favorites list right now so I can check for updates easier. From one Hentai Sis to another--- Paris
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July 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
what an evil cliffhanger! someone should illustrate poor sesshy on that table though.... X.x gah! wait, no dont do that - dont fuel the darkness that we all seem to enjoy! ;)
please update soon :D
please update soon :D