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I just realized that my review may not have come out right... damn html crap ~.~ Anyway, this is how it should have come out: I have to say, I read to chapter 6 not too long ago, and I can't help but cringe. The 'scottish' accent for Jin needs to go. It's irritating, and bad dubb-ish. If anything, have him speak a cross of modern slang and stereotypical country-folk talk. And as for your writing style... Whenever the speaker changes, you begin a new paragraph. For example : The Inu-gang was walking, on another stupid mission for another stupid shard. (New Paragraph)"Are we there yet?" Shippou whined. (NP)"No, Shippou," Kagome sighed then turned to Inuyasha, "Inuyasha, how much longer?" (NP)"Would you all just shut the fuck up! I told you, we're almost there!" Shippou snickered as Inuyasha stomped off muttering about 'stupid brats' and 'annoying bitches'. (NP) "Osuwari!" End. I really hope you listen to my advice. From what I remember, you had a nice fic going, it's just a hard to read and differentiate speakers.

Oh that was a great story so far and I love the detail you've got on it as well. Keep the good work up and let me know when you update.

I have to say, I read to chapter 6 not too long ago, and I can't help but cringe. The 'scottish' accent for Jin needs to go. It's irritating, and bad dubb-ish. If anything, have him speak a cross of modern slang and stereotypical country-folk talk. And as for your writing style... Whenever the speaker changes, you begin a new paragraph. For example : The Inu-gang was walking, on another stupid mission for another stupid shard. "Are we there yet?" Shippou whined. "No, Shippou," Kagome sighed then turned to Inuyasha, "Inuyasha, how much longer?" "Would you all just shut the fuck up! I told you, we're almost there!" Shippou snickered as Inuyasha stomped off muttering about 'stupid brats' and 'annoying bitches'. "Osuwari!" End. I really hope you listen to my advice. From what I remember, you had a nice fic going, it's just a hard to read and differentiate speakers.

OMG I can't wait for more, I have been sucked in by your writtings!!!

Loveeee the story so far!!!!!!

Sel~

Ahhh you have me drooling in anticipation. I can only imagine how this trip to the past is going to turn out. She's got two absolutely yummy demons to ward off any potential suitors so Kouga's going to be in for it if he pulls the "You're my woman" routine. Should be interesting times ahead. I'll try to be as patient as possible :D Update soon please.

So very interesting, looks like things just took a major turn for the worse. I love the interactiong you have going on between Hiei and Kagome. Such a lovable fire apparition, if a bit misunderstood. *huggles him tightly* Excellent chapter, love the length and detail, the fight scene was fine. Far better than anything I could have come up with. Now, I must wander off to finish the next chapter of On The Night Of A Blood Red Moon. I'm down to the last paragraph, hopefully I can pull this one off well and people don't kill me. It's a bit.. Dark... Eh well, Update soon please!

Agggghhhhh!

I can't take it! You write such wonderful chapters and then go and leave me hanging like that?! How very unfair. This is one of my all time favorite fics here and it drives me crazy to have to wait for updates. *pouts*

Please, put me out of my misery and write some more....pretty please?

My my my now this is an interesting turn of events. Sesshoumaru is interested in her as well? Hmmm sounds like the makings of a square to me *evil grin* Can't say as I've seen this particular pairing before if thats indeed what you intend to do. I have no complaints whatsoever, the idea of Kagome with the three of them is enough to inspire the naughtiest of mental images. As for who came through the well, I'd be tempted to say Kikyo which would be the logical choice however you could throw everyone for a loop and have it be someone like Hojo or Koenma lol Absolutely wonderful chapter, can't wait to read the next one. Update soon please.

On comment.

QUIT WITH THE STUPID STARS AT THE END. IT IS CAUSING THE LINE TO EXTEND BYOND THE SCREEN AND IT SERIOUSLY PISSES ME OFF THAT I HAVE TO USE THE VERTICAL SCROLL TO READ THE TEXT.

CAN'T YOU MAKE LIKE 5 STARS???

Otherwise I like the story

Arigato! !

But Onegai, Another chapter....I can't wait, this story is so good!!!!

Waiting as patiently as possible..
Sel~