rate_review Reviews

Curiosity got the better of me. Can't help it. I like to read.

Quick question before I say anything else . . . did you happen to mean epitomize when you wrote eptiomize in Chapter One? I ask because I know I get pissed when I read over my work at a later time and no one's even pointed out my spelling errors or missing words.

Okay, now that I've asked that . . . some critical yet little stuff then thoughts. That's just how I review.

Um . . . Sango's tirade seems a little short . . . good . . . but short. -shrugs-

Anyway . . . you used a word conjunction in place of a possessive . . . from chapter 2: It served it's purpose . . . it's should be its . . .

Chapter 3 you misspelled poison and mewled (mewled looks like a funky version of jeweled), forgot the apostrophe in won't in one sentence . . . umm . . . let's see . . . you have human's loyalty for humans' loyalty . . . unless you mean one person in particular? The way I'm reading it, it sounds like he's testing both Sango and Kaede. Patient is misspelled . . .

Your author's notes in Chapter Four are not at the top of the page but after about the second or third paragraph . . . quite a bit of an interruption in the story itself.

And I'm not going to go over spelling mistakes anymore . . . I'm finding them . . . but they're not . . . numerous. Just a few things here and there, something you can find reading over.

And I have a question, just out of curiosity . . . I know in the anime (which is how I follow Inuyasha) that Inuyasha does not have the poison claws (I buy the DVDs when I have the money and watch the show on Adult Swim -- I never watch eps online) . . . is that something that Sesshomaru teaches Inuyasha in your fic or is it something he inherently knows?

Story's interesting . . . might want to have something in your A/N's or summary about the story being AU . . . before someone starts screaming about how certain things didn't happen in the anime . . . as some people are anal about things like that. Saves on headaches. Anyhoo . . . story is interesting. Very interesting.

Wow. Half the reason I was tempted to read this story was that disclaimer. I started reading and ended up reading straight through everything you have up. It's amazingly well written, and I must say...I love the Kagome bashing. No one likes the girl and I like how you give her her just desserts.

Keep up the excellent work!

**Zeph**

I don't remeber ever reading a stroy where kagome was sexually abused...interesting i like it it almost gives you a reason to like her in this story....keyword almost but i luv this story please continue!!!

Wow. I'm not really a Sesshy/Inu fan but that fic was really good. I luv the Kagome bashing. I hope u keep up the good work.

I agree with the above reviewer.

Now Kagome seems to have a little reasoning behind her madness. Makes me want to find out what the hell her father did.

Also the snippets into her life before going to Feudal Japan add an extra level of depth to both her and the story. I can't wait to see the rest....noe can't wait. You're a damn good author....don't forget it.

*sits and waits* Kisses.

Very nice, love the way you redid it, it adds a lot more to the story. Hope you continue soon. ^^v

Thanks for updating this fast. I wonder what happened to Kagome. O well, update soon.

hmmmmm...it's a little different than before but just as good if not better, continue please!

hahahahaha, this is so funny, cocoa. First of all you had to rewrite your story, and second, you get all these crazy reviews concerning nothing of the story. But if you really want people to read it (and like it), you better start writing fast because no one is going to want to read chapters over and over again even if it is a little different. Update, fast, no FASTER. ANd may i suggest you don't take the crazy comment of *peoples* that personally.

If you could please stop reposting what is already in the other chapters that would be great. You have great ideas just take your time writing out the chapter and you;l do fine. ^_^